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Peculiarly Pleased
Contributed by
jyssvw22
on
Wednesday, 19th October 2005 @ 08:14:46 PM in AEST
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If you only had what I’ve got
Its not that’s its so great
But its what I’ve got
To work with
To learn from
And to see, what not
True
Or false
Either way
Its gonna’ cost
Wanna walk in my shoes
Take a hike
Pal
Who do you think you are
Talking about this and that
As if you have been there
As if you have seen the screams
Which preoccupy my dreams
So who is it gonna be this time
Can you read the wall on the clock
Can you see through the shallowness
Which buries the blurriest plot
Engages the dangerous
Most sought out
Precious of gifts
Delicate and sensitive
Where did this monster come from
From whom did you originate
And why so late
Why procrastinate
Why not just show up at the gates
When you’re damned well ready
Maybe when you feel the earth shake
The words I can hear
It’s the message not coming in so clear
Choppy static
Electronic nightmare
The atmosphere certainly agrees
The moment seems peculiarly pleased
So take my place
And call me when you are on your knees
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Re: Peculiarly Pleased
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by hauntedscorp on
Thursday, 20th October 2005 @ 08:33:34 PM AEST
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This comes across as a strongly emotive rant. Bitter in detail, and rather resentful towards someone.
I could be reading it all wrong, but I like the attitude I feel in this write. The last stanza especially.
I like the kind of (apparent) irony in the choice of title too : )
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Re: Peculiarly Pleased
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by MrJeans on
Saturday, 22nd October 2005 @ 01:37:14 PM AEST
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Allow me to indulge you in another perspective:
Have you considered walking in the shoes of the person you wrote this about?
Do they treat you with respect?
Do you treat them with the respect they deserve?
Lastly, is the message worth hearing?
Some things to consider. As a reader, this stirred up those questions for me,
and left me thinking of some situations I may or may not have mishandled along the way.
Great poetry, you seem to have alot to say.
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