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The Blade
Contributed by
xDizzyGirlx
on
Tuesday, 18th October 2005 @ 06:45:50 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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She Starves herself to rid herself of him
She says shes perfictly happy
Just being his friend
But she holds her breath with each embrace
Knowing she lied right to his face
She holds the knife to her small chest
Feeling her heart pound behind her small breasts
As the cold metal gazes her soft skin
Life seeping out from deep within
She screams out his name
But this time it doesn't sound the same
As the vision of his face is replaced
By the cold empty clasp
Of the blade that stole her breath
Copyright ©
xDizzyGirlx
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2005-10-18 18:45:50]
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Re: The Blade
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by Cupid on
Tuesday, 18th October 2005 @ 07:56:00 PM AEST
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WOW! POWERFUL poem you've got here xDizzyGirlx!
I love the language, though your spelling needs a little work, I think. Unless it was a typo, which is more easily forgiven... ; )
Keep up the FAB work! |
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Re: The Blade
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by jheng on
Wednesday, 19th October 2005 @ 09:50:18 AM AEST
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| i do like your poem, it may be morbid, but i do like it |
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Re: The Blade
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Thursday, 20th October 2005 @ 02:55:47 PM AEST
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Certainly a very thought provoking write.I liked the impact of the last verse particularly.
Keep on writing
Steve |
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