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Time Out
Contributed by
sprinter27
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Monday, 17th October 2005 @ 09:45:04 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I’m calling a time out
There is not a doubt
I’ve played for too long
Now I’m not that strong
This game is killing me
I’m struggling to be free
I don’t know what to do
And it’s hard to talk to you
I just want to give up it all
And I’m ready to take the fall
I know you want me to talk
And you want to take a walk
But I can’t tell you how I feel
I’m afraid you’ll steal the wheel
And drive me off in to a place
Where we can stare into space
A place where you’ll make me talk
A place where we can only take a walk
Because there is nothing else to do
And the only ones are me and you
I’m calling a time out
I need to have a time out
I’m growing weak and you strong
And I’ve been fighting for too long
I’m calling a time out
There is not a doubt
If I don’t, you’ll win my mind
And you’ll control how I drive
I have to get away from you
Or who knows what I’ll do?
You are right and I am wrong
I am weak and you are strong
You will win if I can’t fight
I know that this isn’t right
But I hurt and don’t want to talk
And I don’t want to take a walk
I’ve got to fight
Even if it isn’t right
I’ve got to push away
Even if it hurts everyday
I’m calling a time out
There is not a doubt
I’ve played for to long
Now I’m not that strong
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sprinter27
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2005-10-17 21:45:04]
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Re: Time Out
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by Misunderstood_gurl on
Monday, 17th October 2005 @ 11:26:28 PM AEST
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I think the game you r talking about is the game of life...am i right? if i am i liked the fact that you compared football to your life. it's a really good poem keep up the gr8 work!
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Re: Time Out
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 18th October 2005 @ 03:36:11 AM AEST
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The game of love : )
I like the repetitive lines in this, as it enhances the desperate plea in your words, and the conflicting emotions.
The flow was on point too; nice and smooth. Those last two stanzas really made the poem for me.
Great job expressing yourself in this one sprints. Keep 'em coming!
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