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The Girl
Contributed by
xpixiexdustx
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Sunday, 16th October 2005 @ 07:21:55 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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She lives in a world of her own
Isolated, dark, and alone
She's a little bit skeptical at times
She writes down all her pain in rhymes
Her eyes are empty and cold
She holds many secrets, untold
Her heart is bruised, her soul is broken
The mysteries of this girl are unspoken
She's pessimistic
Sometimes a little Sadistic
She feels as if her life is going nowhere
And that no one really care's
She's smile's on the outside
So no one questions her pride
But on the inside, she's empty and torn
Disconnected and forlorn
But don't let her fool you..
She has hopes and dreams too
You ask how I know so much of her..
Well the answer is easy, you see...
This girl, is Me.
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2005-10-16 19:21:55]
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Re: The Girl
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by crazy on
Sunday, 16th October 2005 @ 07:27:15 PM AEST
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| nicely writen poem i can understand how it feels to be locked in side your self i always am nice job |
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Re: The Girl
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by matts_sweetie_04 on
Sunday, 16th October 2005 @ 08:55:08 PM AEST
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I can really relate to this poem. I used to feel that way all the time when i was like 14 and 15 years old. I am 19 now and still feel that way at certain points in my life. well writen keep it up
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Re: The Girl
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by Essentially9 on
Sunday, 16th October 2005 @ 10:26:30 PM AEST
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| i suppose the description explained this poem very well... |
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Re: The Girl
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by fielding88 on
Sunday, 16th October 2005 @ 10:51:16 PM AEST
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| hmm, well that ending is a bit cliched by now, perhaps trying to rework it to give it a bit more originality. There may be a few slant rhymes here and there, but nothing a bit of editing couldn't fix. remember to keep up with your commenting! lol, we wouldn't want people thinking you're a sponge around here :P Happy reading! |
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Re: The Girl
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by Zee on
Monday, 17th October 2005 @ 01:59:23 AM AEST
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Nicely written! Even i was living in this state when i was young but now its completely different! Even things would change for u, So cheer up!!
Zee |
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Re: The Girl
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by weepingprophet on
Monday, 17th October 2005 @ 03:36:42 PM AEST
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| beautiful |
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Re: The Girl
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by xPixiexDustx on
Monday, 17th October 2005 @ 05:25:58 PM AEST
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Indeed it doesn, perhaps thats why it is the description..
And uh ..keep up with the commenting?.. I comment all the time.. |
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Re: The Girl
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by shaggy2468 on
Monday, 17th October 2005 @ 09:18:50 PM AEST
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| i love the way you expresed your feelings and emotions thats the same thing i do but a little diffrent i look for the good in life but i still show my thoughts. oh and by the way GREAT poem. |
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