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Whisper
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Whisper
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Friday, 14th October 2005 @ 10:00:34 PM in AEST
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Empty hollow shell
thats how I feel
Forbidden myself even to think or speak the name
Constant Ache deep in my chest
like my heart is never healing
This is what is left
Coz of you
What have I now
A empty dieing shell
I don't care anymore
Nothing matters any how
I sink deeper and get more and more depressed
Yet still my family does not see the
lowly creeping last details
I am going away and as I fade before their eyes
My heart will still whisper still
Lighthouse I love you.
Whisper
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Whisper
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2005-10-14 22:00:34]
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Re: Whisper
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by lostrelic on
Friday, 14th October 2005 @ 10:28:08 PM AEST
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love the poem its a lovely write thank you
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Re: Whisper
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by Archie on
Saturday, 15th October 2005 @ 12:59:16 AM AEST
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| This is a good write. (In my opinion you could have added another stanza to talk about your subject more). I think it was a great surprise ending nonetheless. |
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Re: Whisper
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by PhantomVampyress on
Saturday, 15th October 2005 @ 02:16:20 AM AEST
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i really enjoyed reading this i love the first line and last line especially it has a great flow to it.. good job
JENNITTUDE |
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Re: Whisper
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by jigsma on
Sunday, 16th October 2005 @ 06:45:59 PM AEST
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| Very powerful! Well expressed write! Excellent! |
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Re: Whisper
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by Sinfullilmissmuppet on
Friday, 21st October 2005 @ 09:56:42 PM AEST
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Hey you,
thanx for your comment on my poem!!
I love that poem i can relate to it and i just love the way you expressed it
Im only new to the site so im jus playn around with commenting and reading a few poems and such but yours was definately a stand out!
Till next time
emz |
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Re: Whisper
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by secretwind on
Tuesday, 25th October 2005 @ 11:51:56 AM AEST
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hmm
you flow like I do
from the shadows..... |
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Re: Whisper
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by car21221 on
Sunday, 6th November 2005 @ 08:47:55 AM AEST
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| very true how i can relate to this with my family not feeling like i belong like i am out of place and thank you for thae reply on my dying soldier's i write mostly on my experiences in life. |
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Re: Whisper
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by EvaLastingRose on
Wednesday, 14th June 2006 @ 12:03:39 PM AEST
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| i cant even tell u how much i love this one because it truely relates to what i go through this is great. |
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