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my childhood memories
Contributed by
lostrelic
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Friday, 14th October 2005 @ 08:12:22 PM in AEST
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i tried to drown myself today face down in a street puddle
the children laughed walking pass they do'nt know my pain
i walked home to get my gun i loaded it and put it in my mouth
the taste of cork filled my taste buds where did this string come from?
i threw it on the floor and walked out the door i looked to the heavens and screamed some more
went inside to the kitchen cup board to grab the shiny knife i stabbed it in and wobbled and waved no surprise rubber!
i went to the hall and grabbed my rope i sat and twisted a noose such lovely the details so fine
i stood on the chair and raised my eyes to behold no roof on my house
i woke up this morning confused of my spot i looked up to see my roof
i went to my bed and my gun was there i looked at the knife it was there
then in thought of the nightmare i had i remember one thing that made me mad
it was my toy box in the dream i was a child who did that scream
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Re: my childhood memories
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by crazy on
Friday, 14th October 2005 @ 08:32:08 PM AEST
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what a kool way to put suicide i loved it
nice poem |
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Re: my childhood memories
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by Whisper on
Friday, 14th October 2005 @ 09:37:50 PM AEST
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Interesting honest write
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Re: my childhood memories
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by remote on
Saturday, 15th October 2005 @ 09:22:06 AM AEST
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"its a weird one pls comment if not who cares hahahahahahaha"
I fail to see any humour there. For humour visit:
http://www.thebestpageintheuniverse.net/c.cgi?u=manly_suicide |
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Re: my childhood memories
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 15th October 2005 @ 03:36:53 PM AEST
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| Well, I must say, you're right. This is a bit weird... but in good way. Definitely an interesting write. |
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Re: my childhood memories
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by little_genna on
Monday, 17th October 2005 @ 03:10:50 PM AEST
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This isnt weird at all....
i really related to it.. you have an interesting writing style that I like alot...normally long lines loose my attention but your kept it till the very end.... |
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Re: my childhood memories
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by emystar on
Monday, 17th October 2005 @ 03:51:45 PM AEST
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U almost had me bawling till I got to the last paragraph.
very creative.
luv, huggs,
emy |
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