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Untited As of Now
Contributed by
christopherfriedrich
on
Friday, 14th October 2005 @ 05:03:15 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Did you find the perfect way to flaunt your fake smiles?
How else could you manipulate them for such a long while?
Will they bury themselves or ask for your hands?
Or will their bodies lay still and erode into the land?
Did you bury your dead with the nooses that broke them?
And did you write their epitaphs with the words that choked them?
Did you cut out their tongues or the heads that did hold them?
Or just their ears, so they'd believe what you told them?
You hope it's cold where you're going
Cause that's all that you've been
But you're ***** out of luck,
Hell won't freeze over again.
You'll start off frostbitten and cold, but that ice will soon melt.
And with each ounce of sweat, you'll be living what they felt.
You'll start to shake as the heat dries your skin.
But all devils can't survive hell; you'll never reign again.
You hope it's cold where you're going
Cause that's all that you've been
But you're ***** out of luck,
Hell won't freeze over again.
You hope it's cold where you're going
Cause that's all that you've been
But you're ***** out of luck,
Hell won't freeze over again.
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christopherfriedrich
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2005-10-14 17:03:15]
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Re: Untited As of Now
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by Rasputin_the_Second on
Friday, 14th October 2005 @ 05:11:32 PM AEST
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Very Very clever.
Sounds more like lyrics than poetry.
I loved it, please keep it up. |
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Re: Untited As of Now
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by Dark_and_Cold on
Friday, 14th October 2005 @ 08:38:50 PM AEST
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Very very nice...always nice to read a darker intoned poem that's actually well-written lol.
It really does need a title though...don't feel bad though, I hate the title of my last poem, but too late to change it now lol. |
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Re: Untited As of Now
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by sprinter27 on
Saturday, 15th October 2005 @ 10:23:52 PM AEST
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twisted, but dark. i truely enjoyed reading your write! oh, how i'd love to say those last 2 stanzas to someone... and obviously you do, too. great write, i liked reading it and i think you've done well for a first since 2004. good write, keep up the good work!
~sprints |
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