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stuck on earth
Contributed by
glassicallyunsuperficial
on
Thursday, 13th October 2005 @ 08:07:09 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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trees they were dancing
I swear I saw them prancing
in the woods
dustbins grew head
their smells had all faded
away
what happens when all the things we rely on come to life
will they try to take us in their hands and try to overtake the nation
what happens when the people we thought we knew come back like just another stranger
will they ignore us like we are just another mass prosody of crazy lecturers
lives are lost and
lies are the social anticipation
what's wrong?
Imagination insufficient
I'll have to try another day
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2005-10-13 20:07:09]
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Re: stuck on earth
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by Archie on
Thursday, 13th October 2005 @ 10:02:20 PM AEST
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| I can not answer the questions this poem asks except to say; sometimes it is good to shrink your world view to just where you live then life does not seem so overwhelming. This is a very thought provoking write. |
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Re: stuck on earth
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by liquidsunshine on
Thursday, 13th October 2005 @ 11:50:13 PM AEST
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I do agree with Archie, but from a constructive poetic criticism point of view, I didn't really like this poem much. There didn't seem to be any real flow to me--no real tone, either. Good thoughts, poetic thoughts... just... it's more like thoughts written down than a poem, it seems.
Love and peace,
Chelsea
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