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A Lonely Angel...
Contributed by
eternal_dreamer
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Tuesday, 11th October 2005 @ 10:14:26 PM in AEST
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Lonely Angel
Underneath the star studded sky
Where dreams and wishes are made
A lonely angel wondered why
Her life had been betrayed
Where once love had resided
Now emptiness did dwell
The chambers of her heart
Had a tragic story to tell
Once she walked among humans
Lived her life to the full
She met a wonderful boy
But he talked a load of bull
He promised her the world
He filled her with desire
Everything seemed perfect
But he wound up being a liar
He told her she was everything
The one true love of his life
That there was no other
But he ended up having a wife
The betrayal she could not bear
Her life was now forlorn
Ordained by bitter hate
Her heart lay battered and torn
In her car she takes to the road
Crying with tear filled eyes
No one knows what happened that day
Or why the young girl dies
So underneath the star studded sky
A lonely angel weeps
For what she had and what she lost
And of what she could not keep
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Re: A Lonely Angel...
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by Archie on
Tuesday, 11th October 2005 @ 10:31:27 PM AEST
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| The both of you did a very good job on this poem.. I almost cried. This was definately worth the wait. |
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Re: A Lonely Angel...
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by brew on
Tuesday, 11th October 2005 @ 10:37:57 PM AEST
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.................such beauty and saddness...........SO sorry, yet, you DONT deserve, that ONE>!
Brew~ |
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Re: A Lonely Angel...
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 11th October 2005 @ 10:47:18 PM AEST
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This is so heartbreakingly sad...The two of you and your emotive words, flowed so very well together though! I am getting ever more impressed by these co-writes. I admit, I was never a fan of them before, but I have read some really good ones on here....This being one of them for sure.
Well done you two.
I look forward to another in the future: )
Scorp. |
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Re: A Lonely Angel...
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by ForeverAlone on
Tuesday, 11th October 2005 @ 10:56:40 PM AEST
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awesome job on this poem Sue and Eddy, inda depressed at the moment and is how i feel, but still none the less a great quality poem.
~Clark |
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Re: A Lonely Angel...
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by wizard on
Tuesday, 11th October 2005 @ 11:28:51 PM AEST
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great job, nice flow and beautifully sad.
wiz |
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Re: A Lonely Angel...
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 11th October 2005 @ 11:53:12 PM AEST
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Awwww...that was very very nice....and uh, sad. Great write Sue and Eddy.
Thanks for sharing,
Tim
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Re: A Lonely Angel...
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 12th October 2005 @ 04:58:13 AM AEST
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| Well Sue it turned out fine, I really enjoted writing with you,but all I did was add a few words here and there m yoiu added all the glamour,,coz yer a Starrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr,,,,Eddy |
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Re: A Lonely Angel...
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by strider on
Wednesday, 12th October 2005 @ 09:21:23 AM AEST
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wonderful and truly Sue, always giving good flows to her lines. Sorry Eddy I havent read your poems yet but with this I am sure to read them now.
Expect a comment from me Eddy - soon
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Re: A Lonely Angel...
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 12th October 2005 @ 10:58:22 AM AEST
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Oh wow, you two did it, well, its abouuut time. LOL.
Are you two trying to make me cry?
This is a beautiful heartwrenching poem.. I will pray for that angel, because I know she exists.
Raquel Leah :D |
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Re: A Lonely Angel...
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by allymp on
Wednesday, 12th October 2005 @ 01:36:03 PM AEST
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wow this is amzing
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Re: A Lonely Angel...
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by Darkhorse71 on
Wednesday, 12th October 2005 @ 01:43:23 PM AEST
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Sue and Eddy, this is so sad and real. You captured the emotions perfectly I think. Great write you two!!!!
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Re: A Lonely Angel...
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by anitajames on
Wednesday, 12th October 2005 @ 07:37:39 PM AEST
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I really liked this. Great collaboration. I am moved by the last stanza.
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Re: A Lonely Angel...
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by robertdavidson on
Thursday, 13th October 2005 @ 02:53:29 AM AEST
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A beautifully sad, well-told story of a girl betrayd by a heartless man. I can feel the heart-break behind every word. |
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Re: A Lonely Angel...
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 13th October 2005 @ 11:16:40 AM AEST
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A most beautiful co effort and of course you
always shine like the brightest of stars with your own personal magic.
(((((Sue))))))
Ben |
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Re: A Lonely Angel...
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 15th October 2005 @ 03:10:42 AM AEST
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Hey Susie Q!! (and Eddy too)
This was an exquistite write. So beautifully tragic. Sweet and
yet so painfully mournful it imparts a tear stain on my heart....
Wonderful write, you two. *****
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Re: A Lonely Angel...
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by DreamPoetess on
Sunday, 16th October 2005 @ 03:02:20 AM AEST
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eternal_dreamer, first I want to thank you again for commenting on my very first poem.
The poem you two created here is very stimulating to my senses. Reading it made me feel as empty as that little angel, I feel a very deep emotional stress from reading this piece, so you know its fantastic. Yes, decorated so beautifully sad, makes me tear up terribly. Yes, both of you writers who created this wonderful poem are extremely talented, I like this immensely, my joy is boundless.
signed :>
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Re: A Lonely Angel...
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by ChibiMiroku on
Sunday, 6th November 2005 @ 10:20:23 PM AEST
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A wonderful poem about love and loss....and everything before, between, and after.
Beautifully done, you two!
"....For what she had and what she lost...." is my favorite line; it expresses in so few words the oh-so-great difference between having had....and having lost.
Great write, as usual!
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Re: A Lonely Angel...
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by moses on
Friday, 17th February 2006 @ 05:04:51 PM AEST
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love these co-writes, well done again. So true so true, this poem hit the rite spot if that makes any sense, i deff. know what ur saying
much love,
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Re: A Lonely Angel...
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 22nd June 2006 @ 07:49:31 PM AEST
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Accolades I need not proffer
Sue 'n' Eddy here do offer
story sad betrayed and die
to be an angel in the sky.
Dumb, but you two did good in the story. My compliments.
wabl
KenMoore
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