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Needle's Eye
Contributed by
chibimiroku
on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 11:13:09 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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The line stretches on,
Never stopping, never ending.
Knife thing and knife sharp,
Always straight, never bending.
Many are those
Who have tread the line,
But for now,
The line is mine.
Leaning to a side
Wine none other astride
Starts the fall.
A close friend helps here;
Clasp tightly on what
You hold dear.
The choice is now mine
Not whether to tread this line
But if a friend is worth the time.
Glancing ahead to either side
And staring at those left with
Naught but clothes and ruined pride.
Skin deep and outwardly happy,
But deeply tinged with bitterness inside.
Dare I risk it?
Dare I take the chance?
Dare I try the fit?
Dare I change my stance?
How much should I care
How others see me?
Trapped in a cave like a bear,
Or like the eagle, soaring free?
The bear is doubly smoked,
The eagle shot and stuffed.
The furnace of opinion is already stoked
What changes if I huff and puff?
Like a general watching others come,
Should he retreat and suck his thumb?
Does he try to meet them half way,
Or does he find them where and when they say?
The burden of my choice
Lies heavily upon my shoulders.
Shall I give my problems voice,
Or grow yet stronger…and colder?
Still trapped at a crossroads of yet, I stay
But close attention to my surroundings I pay
My problems I will solve, my debts I will pay.
But my decision unmade, and here I will stay.
I think I am tilting
The slipping beginning
But still I wait,
Content just to let fate
Decide.
Copyright ©
chibimiroku
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2005-10-10 23:13:09]
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Re: Needle's Eye
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by Dark_and_Cold on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 11:27:06 PM AEST
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| Hmm...that's very interesting...I'm guessing you're male? |
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Re: Needle's Eye
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by justkevi on
Tuesday, 11th October 2005 @ 01:43:18 AM AEST
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Interesting how your poem doesn't really conclude...
But it gets a little irritating just brooding about the question. Don't brood. It's unattractive. |
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Re: Needle's Eye
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by brokenwings on
Tuesday, 11th October 2005 @ 06:34:43 AM AEST
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good write
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Re: Needle's Eye
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Thursday, 13th October 2005 @ 03:00:48 AM AEST
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Well I'm also guessing u must be a male?
A different write from ur others. Very interesting. I learn about u a little more each time I read ur writes. Well done on this one.
*hugs*
Sue |
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