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Writing My Own Requiem
Contributed by
Dark_and_Cold
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Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 04:39:19 PM in AEST
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Darksome night
Losing sight
Staring in a shattered mirror
Stood it all, didn’t fall
Still I’m chained by fear.
Burning light
Burning bright,
Nothing is all that is clear
Standing tall, as I crawl
Knowing the end is near
Soulless kite
Fallacious might
Fluttering on the ground
Stuffed and shot, sold and bought
Searching for what can’t be found.
Bitter in spite,
Angry in fright.
Screaming without a sound
All is fair—in despair
With strife my days are wound.
Futile to fight,
No hopes to unite
A price that I must pay
Lost control—of my soul
No longer will fate delay
Black to white,
Wrong to Right
As the world fades away
Blank stare, to mask my terror
It ends in a swirl of gray.
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Re: Writing My Own Requiem
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by lostrelic on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 05:45:14 PM AEST
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very nice write i really enjoyed the flow
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Re: Writing My Own Requiem
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by grim6669 on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 05:47:24 PM AEST
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| HEY BIG BROTHER!!! ... I'M COMMENTING !!!...YAY..... I REALLY LIKE THIS ONE JUST LIKE EVERY OTHER ONE YOU'VE POSTED ......THEY ARE ALL REALLY GOOD SO FAR .... KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK BIG BRO!! |
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Re: Writing My Own Requiem
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by crazy on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 06:24:01 PM AEST
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| kool poem its deep and dark it brings out the bad sid of me to hear stuff like this awsome write keep it up |
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Re: Writing My Own Requiem
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 08:04:55 PM AEST
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I have to say this piece was very well written.
great job |
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Re: Writing My Own Requiem
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by Archie on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 10:32:01 PM AEST
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This is the fourth time i have read this poem today. I was not goint to leave a comment but i think it is fair to do so.
This is well written, you have talent. (I hope that you use it to encourage ) You remind me of two other poets on site Neptunes_First and Vitreous_Soul your style of writing is closer to Vitreous_Soul's style. I am recomendig them to you so that you can find poets who write similar to you. You can thank me later. |
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Re: Writing My Own Requiem
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by ArsenicMyst on
Wednesday, 12th October 2005 @ 05:01:19 PM AEST
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i love this poem
maybe im just being silly but my first thought was
this poem is the antithesis of Star Light Star Bright
dungeons are very chilly places
but so are clear autumn nights ...
*´¨` ·.¸¸.* Arsenic
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Re: Writing My Own Requiem
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 20th October 2005 @ 04:22:38 PM AEST
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| i love this poem. it has a really good flow and its the best kind-dark and very deep. Write more!! lol |
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Re: Writing My Own Requiem
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by Kamal on
Monday, 12th December 2005 @ 03:10:13 PM AEST
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That was hot!!
I see that gray is your relief. Between two powers Black and White.. people?
Neutral
Black to white,
Wrong to Right
As the world fades away
Blank stare, to mask my terror
It ends in a swirl of gray.
I have to commend your talents teach me your secret. I write too but not like you... |
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Re: Writing My Own Requiem
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by brew on
Thursday, 13th July 2006 @ 09:36:49 PM AEST
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So much talent, from a brilliant writer.! NEVER..........think you have nothing to offer, Its shown in all writes. Like talent is a great offering, and not always given .YET urs are, and always will be. :Look Iwill always around for the :friend: thing.....
Hugs
Brew~ |
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