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You Are The One
Contributed by
Darkhorse71
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Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 02:53:06 PM in AEST
Topic:
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I am the one who loves you so,
that’s the reason I let you go.
Even though our love was so right
you deserved a future more bright.
Disabled, crippled I became,
unable to support your claim
of a future with no dismay;
life is funny in that sad way.
Your boys are special, they deserve
a dad who doesn’t have to swerve
away from all things physical,
for them it is not practical.
And you, my love, deserve the best;
not this life that became a mess
on that fateful day long ago.
It hurts so much, I love you so.
Why is it that I cannot see
life without you eternally?
For when all has been said and done,
you are the one…
darkhorse71
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Re: You Are The One
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by lostrelic on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 03:11:39 PM AEST
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very lovely write nice and to the point
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Re: You Are The One
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 03:13:34 PM AEST
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wow john. How very sad. I surely hope your days are
better now. This is an exquisite write, however
unfortunate the circumstance may be...
*hugs*
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Re: You Are The One
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by brew on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 03:43:50 PM AEST
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Wow.pwoerful, and depth write.! To long, for love, and it get kicked back, but from the one who kicks the hardest.......the self.! Loved reading, this.
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Re: You Are The One
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by O7NeVeS on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 05:49:57 PM AEST
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I agree with Brew...def powerful write. Awesome job.
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Re: You Are The One
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 06:25:26 PM AEST
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John a powerful poem written so well. I'm so sorry things did not go well for you. I hope that all is well with you now.
An emotional poem filled with words from the depths of ones heart. May your days be brighter ones.
*hugs*
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Re: You Are The One
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 11th October 2005 @ 03:35:58 AM AEST
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Good write.
U have big ole heart.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: You Are The One
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 11th October 2005 @ 02:26:30 PM AEST
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Hmmm...flow-wise this seemed to hit a couple bumps, but when I read it with a more staccato rhythm, it worked out the kinks. This poem is well written, and you express yourself well. The subject itself makes me cringe a little. Only because I hate when someone says 'I love you, that's why I have to leave you'. Admittedly, I have never had someone say this to me, nor have I ever said it to a bf. I still don't agree with that way of thinking though! I just think, no matter how you, me, or whoever views themself, and thinks we may screw up someone's life, we should at least let the other person decide if it's worth the 'risk'. Isn't that what love's really about??
Just my opinion, but another good read by you still : )
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Re: You Are The One
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 11th October 2005 @ 04:59:56 PM AEST
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If ever anyone asks you, what do you want from me, reply to them... Everything..
Give the person you love everything you have to offer..
My first husband passed away.. I was so in love with him. It hurt me so bad, I just didn't know how to handle the love I had for him, I could not share it with him here on earth, while he was in heaven..
Then one day I realized, I do not have to stop loving him.. I can still keep my love for him blooming everyday... in one of my poems I write... as long as I am alive, I will live for you, and love you, and I am running this race here on earth, in order to see your face again.
Your write is beautifully written in that it shows your heart, how strong it is, and keep loving, and never ever leave that love..love is a precious thing, Never, ever turn your back..
Once I fall in love, I am in love eternally... I remarried, the only thing I said to my present husband before we married was, Yes, I will marry you, and never tell me who to love, or how to love, just let me love. And yes, he asks me what I wanted from him, my reply was.. EVERYTHING!!!!
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Re: You Are The One
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by Vampirequeen on
Wednesday, 12th October 2005 @ 02:24:29 PM AEST
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I can really feel for you in this one.
Sometimes love is great and sometimes love really suck.Anyways take care
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Re: You Are The One
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 15th October 2005 @ 01:12:07 PM AEST
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Amazing write john, you need to realize though, while you think you may be being a burden, if the other person feels the same way about you, little things won't matter. Your going to find someone amazing one day john, and they won't care about anything but you. Hope your days get brighter soon.
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Re: You Are The One
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by Archie on
Tuesday, 18th October 2005 @ 03:38:25 AM AEST
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| I like your selflessness in this poem. The rhyme sceme is very good. Your title is the same as a song i wrote in 1999 (not posted) called "You are the one" I read it to see if it said the same thing (had the same message) it doesn't but your message is very good. |
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