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Sigh
Contributed by
Zandria
on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 04:26:53 AM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
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there is a stumble
an attempt missed
they tumble down together
laughing
Their eyes meet
realization slowly invading their pupils
The wide grins slowly dissipate
replaced by nervous crooked smiles
Warm breath caresses
pinking cheeks
Awareness creeps up
the weight
comfortable
An attempt to rise momentarily brings them closer still
and then
it happens
Copyright ©
Zandria
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2005-10-10 04:26:53]
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Re: Sigh
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by Wachumiri on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 05:37:14 AM AEST
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Sigh... it's a good title for it, I think. This is good, Gaby, very good. Read it Wednesday.
Take care, amiga. Nos veremos despues.
Cuidate.
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Re: Sigh
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by Fionndruinne on
Tuesday, 11th October 2005 @ 03:05:25 AM AEST
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Excellent form! I'm liking this one. It didn't say a whole lot, though, from my not-in-the-knowledge-of-the-moment point of view. Still, the things that are described are vivid and graceful.
Keep it up!
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