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Exempt
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 05:21:06 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Desecrated.
Evaporated.
The cloak is dropped
another soul swapped
Impede.
Succeed.
Bind you up---handcuff
Do you like it rough?
Entice.
Precise.
Stellar game in motion
Winning? A perceived notion
Penetrate.
Satiate.
Greedily consumed whole
exerting no self control
Lured.
Cured.
Another injustice married
concrete evidence buried
Artificial.
Dismissal.
Messy feelings reside
where my unkempt heart died
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
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2005-10-08 17:21:06]
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Re: Exempt
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by jigsma on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 06:55:13 PM AEST
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| Wow! Very interesting and cryptic! I like it! And additionally like that style! Superb work!! |
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Re: Exempt
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 07:03:06 PM AEST
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Wow scorpy! A masterful piece of work. I never seen
so much said with so few words. Wonderfully crafted, my
friend. Your writing leaves little to be desired. Such an
interesting little scorpio.....
Cheers!
~Breezy
p.s. love the title too! Perfecto! |
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 07:13:41 PM AEST
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Goodness! (there must be something in the air around here... )
This is wicked in the most wonderful way, Scorpichoochoo! Please don't take this the wrong way - but it reads/feels as if you spit this onto the page... as if it were some rancid thing that your stomach couldn't tolerate. Wooosh! (and ouch, yeh.) Veiled, yeh... but not entirely I don't think - which works for me!
Excellent, Scorphie... and how!
~Snem
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Re: Exempt
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by brew on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 07:50:37 PM AEST
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Well, you have out done, this time. The words, flowing, yet trying to make things become more sense.! It was powerful, and subtle. Thanks for sharing this write.! Love all your posts.
Brew~ |
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by O7NeVeS on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 08:18:01 PM AEST
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| awesome write!!! TD |
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Re: Exempt
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 08:30:28 PM AEST
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(((((((((((((((((((( Scorperiffic ))))))))))))))))))))
Oh yeah, I get the gist. Damn how I can feel the emotion here.
You are my friend and I hate to see you hurting but wow, another awesome write nonetheless. You are incredible.
Take care
Timberrrrrrrrrrrr
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by sprinter27 on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 09:59:01 PM AEST
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wow, scorp, i LUV this right, it is awesome. i truely liked reading this, as all of yours i do. wow, i re-read it and still love it, it's terrific, scorp! keep up the great work!!
~sprints |
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by zalzool on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 10:53:42 PM AEST
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hmm.. really nice work
to tell u the truth im speechless
literally speechless
amazin write
*applause* |
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 9th October 2005 @ 12:22:49 PM AEST
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well exsposed even from between the lines,
as always a leading contender in the arena
of of broken hearts, well done scorp your stylish and one of a kind.
(((((scorp)))))
OO is on it's way lol
Ben |
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Sunday, 9th October 2005 @ 05:41:51 PM AEST
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Scorp I hate to see you hurting my friend.
Indeed this is a masterpiece so cleverly crafted in every detail. Time and time again you can always produce such remarkable work to captivate your reader. Sheer talent on display. You rock girl! May your beautiful heart sing a happier tune soon my friend.
*heartfelt hugs to a wonderful Miss*
Sue |
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 11:30:15 AM AEST
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sure, you didn't come right out and say it, but this is blunt enough and has feeling!
Nice format and delivery scorpy. feel better soon!!! |
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by Darkhorse71 on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 01:04:14 PM AEST
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Hey Scorp, I really like your style in this (as I do in all your work). Such a vivid, emotional outpouring of your heart. Great poem!!!!!
john |
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by Archie on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 02:42:56 PM AEST
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| This is very good. You touch upon the feelings of loneliness and dejection well in your write. You have a great gift for revealing the heart. This is totally relateable |
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by wizard on
Wednesday, 12th October 2005 @ 12:06:06 AM AEST
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wow, this is great. i love the flow, rhyming and format.
and yes, there is a bit of ambiguity to it, which makes it more enticing..i read it several times.
wiz |
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 16th October 2005 @ 04:48:07 PM AEST
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Well I'm sure there's nothing I can say, someone else hasn't already, but extremely great write, it's always a pleasure reading your poetry.
-Cassy |
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by LostAmbition on
Friday, 11th November 2005 @ 12:04:21 PM AEST
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hell, who is this jerk off
any damn way?????????
i'm happy hes inspiring
awesum poetry from the scorp
but he gives guys a bad name
u seem so sad in this poem
even in yer sarcastic ones i
can feel yer pain in the words
hope things get better for ya
again, i have to say
the format u used
i love it
good stuff
feel better scorp |
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by felicitous on
Sunday, 12th March 2006 @ 07:24:57 AM AEST
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| all the can be said has, but nevertheless, well done for just a remarkable piece of work. the emotion is tangible and i hear you. may our hearts heal my friend. |
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Saturday, 1st November 2014 @ 08:30:44 PM AEST
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| You are a phenom of a poet. there are many great poets in the world and throughout time, but you really are one of our times best poets, and this piece proves it. You are so clever with your word play and thought process. i am jealous of you, lol. i love to see how you think about things and the words you choose. |
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