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Somewhere under Blue Stars
Contributed by
brew
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Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 12:22:57 AM in AEST
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Floating, yet not going anywhere
Beautiful stars, through the nite
Makes , one say its all afloat
To look, way beyond, and even farther than that
Its there
Its captured
Yet
Not, the way one perceives, what has been
How can others make it
How can the one who has, know it
Too available, and too close
its all through the inner, soul
And somehow lost
Cant answer
And wont
To hope again, is the key
It did, but is it now?
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Re: Somewhere under Blue Stars
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 12:29:21 AM AEST
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Very thought provoking a lovely write deep meaning as well as deep feelings wish u well nice style u have . . .
(((((dayna)))))
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Re: Somewhere under Blue Stars
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by Fionndruinne on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 12:35:03 AM AEST
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I like this. It is thought-provoking and passages such as
How can others make it
How can the one who has, know it
Too available, and too close
its all through the inner, soul
show quite a bit of depth. I did twinge a bit at "nite" rather than "night". And the last line feels a bit disconnected. Maybe the question it asks would be better with another line or two transitioning into it.
But enough with critique. Keep it up.
Andrew |
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Re: Somewhere under Blue Stars
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by brew on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 12:48:51 AM AEST
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Thanks all for the comment, and yes, Andrew, it was just easier, to type nite.! All, is always, great to know.!
Dayna |
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Re: Somewhere under Blue Stars
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by Archie on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 01:04:16 AM AEST
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| It is simple to me. The stars guide me in the night to my destination and show me the time to plant and the time to harvest. But most of all the stars convince me that this life did not spring from chaos but from order and order is a created thing. Which requires a creator; God. I see the stars, but can i also see god's hand among them? |
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Re: Somewhere under Blue Stars
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by Vampirequeen on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 02:15:40 AM AEST
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I really like this alot.
Floating, yet not going anywhere
Beautiful stars, through the nite
Makes , one say its all afloat
To look, way beyond, and even farther than that
Its there
Its captured
awsome |
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Re: Somewhere under Blue Stars
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by remote on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 03:34:39 AM AEST
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| I know why this is under 'abstract' however I am curious where this one came from. |
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Re: Somewhere under Blue Stars
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 04:56:07 PM AEST
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Yes, this is abstract ; )
To me, it seems to be about being unsure which direction to follow in life, and in opening up to potential love again. I could be wrong, but the ending makes me think of getting 'signs' or signals about what to do, but wondering if you're interpreting them correctly. It is indeed a thought-provoking mind spill, and a good read too!
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Re: Somewhere under Blue Stars
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by Jeff_Scott_Morehead on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 11:05:21 AM AEST
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Excellent...
I love intelegent writes like this one.
Jeff |
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Re: Somewhere under Blue Stars
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 12:53:52 PM AEST
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| good poem, I like a poem that makes you think,,,Eddy,,, |
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