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A Different Role
Contributed by
Archie
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Friday, 7th October 2005 @ 11:47:42 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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The touch of a hand heals the broken heart
and reminds me of my promise made
I go back to that vase the broken pieces of glass
Let's glue it back together again;
This was the part i called friendship
This was the heart that I gave
Smashed and depleted yet beating
I hold it in my hands again
This was the part i called holy
the part that would save me from harm
I glue it to the first shard called friendship
and now i have friendship with God
This is the shard that was serving
this was the part I displayed
The part of the vase that faced outward
It's now going back to its place
Gently as time passes by
The vase takes on a different role
it once again salvages life
One by one thousands of pieces
Shards of the vase in the trash
get glued back together to save me
so that i know whose that i am
I know that it will not be easy
each piece brings pain and brings joy
On a magical journey it takes me
That one day will bring me back home.
Notes; In all there are 5 poems in the series "A different role" including 1 I wrote this year 3 of them are posted on site they are all based on the healig heart forgiving the ones who hurt it and continuing to do good which makes an impact. Each has its own story for being written and has taught the writer lessons he continues to learn. I hope whoever reads this benifiets from it the way i have.
Copyright ©
Archie
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2005-10-07 23:47:42]
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Re: A Different Role
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 12:19:53 AM AEST
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U write the nicest poems archie u have a very
favorable style, u know your craft as well as your art, well done . . .
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Re: A Different Role
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by Vampirequeen on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 01:25:37 AM AEST
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| awsome you did great on this. |
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Re: A Different Role
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by venkat on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 01:30:14 AM AEST
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This is a wonderful role Archie, The thought and imagery is stunning."This was the heart that I gave Smashed and depleted yet beating I hold it in my hands again This was the part i called holy"..what more to say! it is beautifully done. Venkat
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Re: A Different Role
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by remote on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 03:17:43 AM AEST
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| I guess you were a better writer back then, I liked this one too. |
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Re: A Different Role
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by Wachumiri on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 04:34:01 AM AEST
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Aother good poem out of your arsenal. I love the way every poem of yours has a great lesson to teach. I pray that my ears will hear them,and my heart understand them. Thank you, Archie, for another good piece.
Take care.
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Re: A Different Role
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 05:14:13 AM AEST
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Incredibly awesome, Archie. I like the way you intertwine your life and the vase. Skillfully done.
Incredible talent.
Thank you for sharing
Tim
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Re: A Different Role
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by sweetangeluk on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 07:49:47 AM AEST
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Like a jigsaw we piece the parts together bit by bit.. slowly we find the picture is completed.
I loved this one Archie
Excellent
Love Angelxx
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Re: A Different Role
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by inoc on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 08:14:24 AM AEST
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The vase in your poem is such a good way to explain how to mend a broken heart....and deal with doing good to others...thanks Archie for this write you submitted
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Re: A Different Role
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 03:48:53 PM AEST
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Hmmm I wonder if some rude commenters were 'a better' person 'back then'. ; )
I think this is a really good write, and the comparisions you used are creative and each adds a dimension to your emotive words.
Well done!
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Re: A Different Role
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by fielding88 on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 03:51:52 PM AEST
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| This is probably the best concept I've ever seen for a poem on this entire site. It leaves the door open for oh so much and the shards of the vase are just wonderful. I can only imagine how many shards there are, and it was just a fantastic idea that you've come up with here. I don't know how else to put it. It's just such an original idea that lets you speak volumes about your own life and experiences, and how they just intertwine to produce the current individual. Just awesome, you get five stars for this one. |
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Re: A Different Role
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by anitajames on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 11:21:18 PM AEST
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Apparently great minds think alike. I can definitely see the similarities between our poems, but yours is much superior to mine. As always, I admire your way with words. Thank you for sharing, for it serves to teach those who are touched by it.
Ann
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Re: A Different Role
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Sunday, 9th October 2005 @ 11:02:08 PM AEST
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Archie this is a remarkable write.The sharded pieces of ur heart been put back together to make u who you are. There is always a valuable lesson to be learnt from ur brilliant poems. It's been an amazing journey through ur life. May God always guide your beautiful heart my dear friend.
*hugs*
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Re: A Different Role
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by secretwind on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 10:09:10 PM AEST
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when ever I need to feel positive I flow on your writes and smile again
you are a healer |
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Re: A Different Role
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by Robert_Edgar_Burns on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 11:20:35 PM AEST
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2 Corinthians 9:10 And He said unto me, My grace is sufficient for thee; for my strength is made perfect in weakness: for when I am weak, then am I strong. In other words, Let go and let God!
I know that is how your vessel was put back together even without your having said so. PTL
God Bless!
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Re: A Different Role
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by Candice on
Wednesday, 21st December 2005 @ 09:42:52 AM AEST
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Very intence
Good thing you held on to this for all those years. |
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