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Mommy dearest cut off my hand
Contributed by
Desolated_Denial
on
Friday, 7th October 2005 @ 01:02:42 PM in AEST
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Talking back
beat me down
All alone
in your gown
Going down
down again
Take me back
to the end
I want to go
Get off my mind
I want to show
I don't have time
I don't know
You don't care
All alone
Piggy fair
Wake up to you're loving damnation
All wrapped up with no where to go
Wake me up to my sanity salvation
Tell me what you want to know
Looking back
Hour glass
Time is bleak
You're so weak
With a cause
Or your claws
I don't mind
I have some time
Chasing me
I'm willing
Never need
the running scene
It's what you guess
beat to impress
I don't care
Your plastic hair
Put me, put me, put me in your chair
kill me, kill me, kill me on your stage
Lull me, lull me, lull me, with your stare
I don't want the time ...
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Re: Mommy dearest cut off my hand
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 7th October 2005 @ 04:32:47 PM AEST
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Are you just choosing words because they rhyme? because your not making any sense boyo |
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Re: Mommy dearest cut off my hand
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by judasman on
Friday, 7th October 2005 @ 04:51:08 PM AEST
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you don't care
all alone
piggy fair
cool!
good write a bit obscure but nevertheless good |
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Re: Mommy dearest cut off my hand
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by Desolated_Denial on
Friday, 7th October 2005 @ 06:07:43 PM AEST
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Thank you for your constructive critizism... and no, i'm not choosing them because they rhyme ... look past face value. If you look past superficial rhymes, then you would see the meaning.
Thank you for your comments, though. I truly am grateful. |
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Re: Mommy dearest cut off my hand
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by grim6669 on
Sunday, 9th October 2005 @ 12:14:47 PM AEST
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i really like this one.....i love the way you write and the words you choose.....don't mind what the others say about the words they say you're making up....even if you are just making them up, i still love your poetry.
keep up the good work.
grim6669
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Re: Mommy dearest cut off my hand
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by Minus_Blindfold on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 07:33:13 PM AEST
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| Go Lili, go Lili, go, go, go Lili.... |
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