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The Ice Breaker...
Contributed by
mccscratch
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Thursday, 6th October 2005 @ 07:58:44 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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when her touch became blind and cold,
and her clutch became careless and loose
when the conversations had run dry
and her gestures became so obtuse
when her hidden habit appeared clearly
and her car was never home
when there was no money for her rent
and she never answered her phone.
when her gaze was blank and lifeless
and the thoughts of you weren't there.
and she was always "on her way out"
just when you really started to care
she says she realizes "we rushed In
to renaming ours from mine"
And she knew she wanted a break,
"there’s no more tingle in my spine"
as she spoke from far across the room,
with her blood racing from a bump of meth
she told you "it’s not enough"
yards away you still felt her icy breath
with her face seeming so pale and bleak
and all her things packed up in the hall,
standing there she told you bluntly
"we never truly loved each other at all"
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Re: The Ice Breaker...
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by lostrelic on
Thursday, 6th October 2005 @ 09:27:26 PM AEST
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very smooth write with a great point cool write
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Re: The Ice Breaker...
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by Archie on
Friday, 7th October 2005 @ 12:59:29 AM AEST
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| Very sad and unfortunate -that this poem can actually be the reality of someone's life is a heart breaker. |
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Re: The Ice Breaker...
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by remote on
Friday, 7th October 2005 @ 03:45:41 AM AEST
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Very good write.
Amazing how almost every relation gone bad end with this line "we never truly loved each other at all". How true, true love is forever after all. Makes you feel like telling her, "thanks for telling me, I wouldn't have known otherwise".
There is true love somewhere and she will stay. |
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Re: The Ice Breaker...
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by brokenwings on
Friday, 7th October 2005 @ 05:35:40 AM AEST
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that is a great poem , how often people fake love..
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