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If You Love Me
Contributed by
candysears
on
Thursday, 6th October 2005 @ 12:36:24 PM in AEST
Topic:
LoveRemembered
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If you love me, why is my
Heart so heavy?
Would my soul be so ashamed?
Black as night,
Not to be seen by others?
Would my heart steady cry within
My soul
Leaving deep scars and heavy burdens
To bare,
Weighting me down so low, leaving
Tears to never end
If you love me, why are the sparkles
From your eyes looks so cold and
And heartless?
Your eyes have dimmed and closed
The portal once was open with
Love,
Now your heart only loves another
And left me all along and lonely,
My heart is heavy and continues to
Cry within
My soul is blacken with the shades of
Black,
Pulling me down in the pits of
Darkness
My heart is torn just as a broken
Glass
Never to be mended in this lifetime
Love is a powerful thing, can my
You happy and sad,
Let you feel you’re on top of the
World,
Than in the same sense can make
You feel as thought the world is on
Top of you,
Such a heavy burden to bear...
Copyright ©
candysears
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2005-10-06 12:36:24]
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Re: If You Love Me
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by ArsenicMyst on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 07:33:13 PM AEST
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heya candy ...
i am always struck by your insight ...
revealed in the last 2 verses
good job
btw ... truth is stranger than fiction ^_^
Arsenic`·.¸·:
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Re: If You Love Me
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Sunday, 9th October 2005 @ 05:35:23 PM AEST
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A strong, powerful and very well written poem.
Keep penning Candy. You know how to draw your reader in from begining to end. Emotions expressed so clearly and so well.
You go girl. Well done.
*hugs*
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Re: If You Love Me
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by hauntedscorp on
Wednesday, 12th October 2005 @ 08:54:31 PM AEST
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Deep, heartfelt emotions. Expressed fairly well. Really good ending. Keep up the writes!
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