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I disappear for you
Contributed by
GurlyTye
on
Tuesday, 4th October 2005 @ 04:05:29 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Alone again
Beaten by heartache
This calamity
Has torn my soul apart
Laboriously
I hold no grudge
Your intentions most honorable
Your heart is full of fear
Ashamed of what is there
The control lies with you
The reins rest in your hands
Slowly I disappear
Allowing you too cope
I leave behind my essence
Descending into the shadows
I will wait there
Loving you
In each breath I take
Hankering to help you
I know this battle
Is your to fight alone
The beating of my broken heart
Clatters to the floor
A slow hard rumble
Pounding in my chest
I yearn for you each day
I close my eyes
And drift off into this dream
I wipe the tears from your face
And tell you its ok
My love for you is strong
As I quietly say, let’s be scared together
I hold you in my arms
As you doze off to sleep
Gently I leave you content in your dream
In the world where you rest
I know that you are safe
A moment of reprieve
For now your struggle can recess
On the sidelines I wait
Hidden from your view
Sending you my strength
Is all that I can do.
Copyright ©
GurlyTye
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2005-10-04 16:05:29]
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Re: I disappear for you
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by purplestary on
Tuesday, 4th October 2005 @ 04:12:08 PM AEST
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this is such a beatiful write.....taking pain to be there for someone you love so they don't have to be alone in the pain that they might have...i love this....amazing...my favorate lines:
"I wipe the tears from your face
And tell you its ok
My love for you is strong
As I quietly say, let’s be scared together"
those lines are so beautiful....thank you for posting this write...
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Re: I disappear for you
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by jheng on
Tuesday, 4th October 2005 @ 04:30:04 PM AEST
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nice write. its so sweet, though you love in silence ... |
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Re: I disappear for you
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by Nazmythian on
Tuesday, 4th October 2005 @ 05:31:48 PM AEST
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Maybe ... just maybe ... I may know more about this than most. Bein' who I am, and all. There are lessons that unfortunately you have to learn, on your own. They can't be taught. They can't be stopped. They will eventually mold you into who you will be. As much as I wish I could provide shelter for you from all things ... *sigh* ... I know I can't. I can tell you though, that what you have written here shows so much growth and understanding. I believe ... if you continue to process what you feel in such a manner, a few things are going to happen. First, you will become more familiar with yourself. Second, you will have a creative outlet for things that are difficult to handle in the future. And third ... if this is indicative of where your writing is going to take you ... you are going to touch vast amounts of people with your words.
Nazmythian ~
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Re: I disappear for you
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by SweetRhythm on
Tuesday, 4th October 2005 @ 05:34:52 PM AEST
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Breathtaking devotion. What couragious sentiments, warm and gaciously bestowed.
"Love" is unselfish. And how well you defined its meaning through your write.
Sometimes in life the wisest things to do are the things that crush us the most but time always reveals the pureness of our seeds and so in turn, not always straight away but do we reap the benefits our our fruitage.
Exceptional outstanding piece of art. Your title and opening words captured me. You have a breeze of "devotion" running through your verses, capturing, captivating & moving.
Lovely, lovely piece of work.
Beautiful.
Enjoyable and truly delightful read.
Moving.
Your fellow poet
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Re: I disappear for you
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by LoveStruck_Hippie on
Tuesday, 4th October 2005 @ 06:24:45 PM AEST
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My sweet daughter Tye, this truely moved me to tears. I whole heartedly agree with your Papa on this one. Very beautifully written. I am so proud of you.
Love you sweety,
*hugs*
Mom |
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Re: I disappear for you
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by Stitch on
Friday, 7th October 2005 @ 06:04:02 PM AEST
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Your writing portrays a mature soul. I see wisdom here that is beyond your years. Thank you for sharing. It is wonderful to see new, young talent blossoming and growing on this site.
Stitch 8) |
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Re: I disappear for you
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 19th August 2006 @ 03:57:52 PM AEST
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Oh sweetie, this is excruciatingly painful to read!
That last stanza is brilliant and so impossibly selfless ..
I feel so much in this piece .. I know it is an old
one, but I hope all is well with you. You have shown
incredible adeptness and a serious strength of
heart, character and will.
Excellent write.
~Breezy |
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