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The Sweetest Sin
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Monday, 3rd October 2005 @ 08:09:28 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Please do...
Plunge the knife in deeper
tell me how you need her
Go ahead...
Increase my expectations
feed my infatuation
Hurry up...
Write another 'fantasy'
pretend it's not aimed at me
I insist...
Keep messing with the mind
of the one you say is 'so kind'
Forgive me...
For stealing your heart
you resented me, right from the start
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
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Re: The Sweetest Sin
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 3rd October 2005 @ 08:16:16 PM AEST
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woa girl whats with this?
You ok?
Need to talk or anything?
let me know.
good write |
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Re: The Sweetest Sin
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by Archie on
Monday, 3rd October 2005 @ 08:19:31 PM AEST
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| I like the simple honesty of this write. It is like a challenge to the one you love. |
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Re: The Sweetest Sin
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by secretwind on
Monday, 3rd October 2005 @ 10:06:15 PM AEST
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yes Indeed
love sucks |
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Re: The Sweetest Sin
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by Essentially9 on
Monday, 3rd October 2005 @ 10:28:27 PM AEST
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| well scorpy i wasnt planning on reading this as i was doing my usual scan of posts for you know what, but what can i say even with your first lines you draw me in, how evil of you =] after all, with reading please do, i must know what =] so good introduction, and i liked your use of italics. your rhyme scheme, and ending =] i can relate, and this is way too many smilies for one comment! ::goes back to studying german:: ich lese gern. i read with pleasure. |
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Re: The Sweetest Sin
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by PhantomVampyress on
Monday, 3rd October 2005 @ 11:32:11 PM AEST
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wow impressive scorp very powerful write i love it great job
JENNI |
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Re: The Sweetest Sin
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by Man_On_High on
Monday, 3rd October 2005 @ 11:34:21 PM AEST
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Scorp,
I love the work..
three line stanzas and such-
great emphasis with the italics as well..
As Always-
Billy
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Re: The Sweetest Sin
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by Darkhorse71 on
Tuesday, 4th October 2005 @ 01:14:20 AM AEST
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So poignant and powerful. Remind me to stay on your good side!!!!! Great write Scorp.
john |
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Re: The Sweetest Sin
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 4th October 2005 @ 02:17:24 AM AEST
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Etremely powerful i can feel the hurt along with the wrecklessness, and yet still longing
4 what i wonder? lovely as always.
(((((((scorp)))))))
Ben |
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Re: The Sweetest Sin
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 4th October 2005 @ 10:09:34 AM AEST
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(((((((((((((((((((( Scorperiffic ! ! ! ))))))))))))))))))))
This one is sooooo extremely powerful. I can feel that "plunging knife" almost as much as much as I can feel the emotion !!!!
You really know how to write them!
opTIMistic
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Re: The Sweetest Sin
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by ArsenicMyst on
Tuesday, 4th October 2005 @ 10:25:12 AM AEST
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*
you do have an amazing body of work ...
edgy and soulful ... real
this one is cutting and street smart
.¸·: Arsenic
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Re: The Sweetest Sin
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Tuesday, 4th October 2005 @ 12:32:11 PM AEST
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This was excellent.. I love your poems they come straight from the heart and are full of raw emtoion. I hope you are ok. If you need to talk pm me... I am here for you since you were there for me a while back..
christina |
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Re: The Sweetest Sin
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Tuesday, 4th October 2005 @ 05:24:35 PM AEST
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You have the amazing ability to express yourself so well. Powerful and full of raw emotion. You write from the heart dear friend and I find that's the best sort of poetry to read. I'm so sorry u have not had much luck with love dearest Scorp. In time my friend the sole keeper of your heart shall make his way to thee. Keep penning down your emotions for it helps ease the pain. Chin up sweet girl, need someone to talk to. I'm always here 4 u dear friend.
Heartfelt *hugs* to dearest Scorp,
Sue, ED. |
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Re: The Sweetest Sin
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by ForeverAlone on
Tuesday, 4th October 2005 @ 07:07:52 PM AEST
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Sometimes times hurt and with that hurt comes a new numbness to the feeling, Ever so gently Scorp i would suggest that you dont become shadowed by the past and lose sight of the future, Pick up the shattered glass and look at the picture with a new outlook on life, its not the end but today is the last day of the rest of your life, and there is no time for regret, Another wonderful poem derserving of praise
~Clark |
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Re: The Sweetest Sin
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by brew on
Tuesday, 4th October 2005 @ 07:41:02 PM AEST
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Hey my kindred soul sis.........Great write...........You should stick to your guns, and make them know.......as my dad would put it, get off the love bucket, and rise...bringing Roses, and all that sparkles. Loved it.........it was extradinary in all aspects.! Take care
brew~ |
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Re: The Sweetest Sin
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by Willofree on
Thursday, 6th October 2005 @ 05:37:45 PM AEST
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Succinct, yet powerful and creative. That's one of several things I like about your poetry, Scorp....that is your willingness to try different styles. Also, the poem seems forceful, like you can take care of yourself.
Well done, Scorp
Will |
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Re: The Sweetest Sin
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 7th October 2005 @ 07:26:24 AM AEST
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Are you a Libra.. such a cutting tongue?
Well serves them right anyway.. hey.. I'de pull that knife out and cut up real beef..
Where is the beeef????
Stop playing around, and find someone who really cares.. stop with the play.. it gets old, huh,, I know this is a poem.. so I will let you down softly.. it is, isn't it?
RL .... |
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Re: The Sweetest Sin
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 7th October 2005 @ 07:27:39 AM AEST
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Yeah, tell em.. get off the cross, we need the wood!!!
RL |
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Re: The Sweetest Sin
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by remote on
Friday, 7th October 2005 @ 07:54:06 AM AEST
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| Loved how you have executed this with a sense of superiority and mocking tone. |
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Re: The Sweetest Sin
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by jigsma on
Friday, 7th October 2005 @ 09:09:31 AM AEST
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| Yes... Right to the point! Well done!!! |
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Re: The Sweetest Sin
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by jyssvw22 on
Friday, 7th October 2005 @ 09:34:48 AM AEST
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this is a powerful write Scorp. Perhaps the most honest I have seen from you yet.
Amazing job expressing yourself.
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Re: The Sweetest Sin
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 7th October 2005 @ 01:27:52 PM AEST
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Hmmmm very deep and full of passionate feeling even in its short length.
You do have a way with telling it like it is!
(I also like you first rhyme... ;) ) |
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Re: The Sweetest Sin
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by wizard on
Wednesday, 12th October 2005 @ 12:10:16 AM AEST
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another great write...such sadness and resent.
sorry you were hurt...but such is love.
as i'm sure you know, writing can be a great release. this may be a case of "the pen being mightier than the sword"
wiz |
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Re: The Sweetest Sin
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by Mangos on
Friday, 21st October 2005 @ 10:58:16 AM AEST
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powerful.
right to the point
real and in your face style
nice work here
as usual |
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Re: The Sweetest Sin
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Monday, 10th November 2014 @ 04:26:16 AM AEST
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| ow, right in the feels. sorry for your pain, i completely understand. don't they say not to play with fire, love is like a fire out of control, or at least lust is. which one is which again? |
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