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I need someone to save me

Contributed by Archie on Sunday, 2nd October 2005 @ 09:46:36 PM in AEST
Topic: SongLyrics



I fail
I keep on falling from the perfect me that dies
In the guilt and remorse building inside
which proves alone
I have no hope of reaching a utopiaic being

I try
but my efforts to reform the debts I owe
are like trying to replace the sands of beaches
washed away
with a bucket and shovel, I feel so all alone

I am swimming in the middle of the ocean
drowning in the waters of my bad habits
Stormy billows are on every horizon
and my strength fails a little more each day

I need someone to save me
clean the slate of all transgressions
held against me

I need someone to save me
instill in me direction
to show me how to live

I knew nothing except
I was gonna die
until you pulled me from the water
and put me on the raft of life

and in the future
if i ever should lose you
with all the debts i owe for sinning
I know that my hope is through

I hope
my little raft sails on a steady course
you provide the wind in my sails to bring me home
from the sea
I can't wait until the day that i finally will see land

I know
there's no way that i can paddle this alone
I see other rafts and it gives me more hope
I'm not alone
We will make this journey together

I was swimming in the middle of the ocean
drowning in the waters of my bad habits
Stormy billows were on every horizon
and my strength failed a little more each day

I still need you to save me
to guide my ship within the ocean
so i know where i am going

(I need you to) save me
teach me how to reach perfection
from your precepts and direction

I know nothing
except i was gonna die
until you pulled me from the water
and put me on the raft of life

I follow the sun
everyday that i can see
and i pray to make it through the storms at night

(Repeat last four stanzas)




Copyright © Archie ... [ 2005-10-02 21:46:36]
(Date/Time posted on site)





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Re: I need someone to save me (User Rating: 1 )
by brew on Sunday, 2nd October 2005 @ 09:51:35 PM AEST
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Seems to me Archie, You have already found, alot.! Thats just me, tho. I liked it.it has something there, that basically can answer its self.! i beleive, you can as well, and I know you beleive.!


Brew~


Re: I need someone to save me (User Rating: 1 )
by kerrah681 on Sunday, 2nd October 2005 @ 10:33:23 PM AEST
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I can't begin to describe to you how much I can relate to this, in fact "relate" is putting it mildly,this is me. My poems, "Asylum of My Mind, "Can Anyone Hear Me???", and "Stay True" are about the Exact same struggle, I Loved this poem so much, I felt every desperate word, AMAZING poem, Thanks so much for sharing it with Me...


Re: I need someone to save me (User Rating: 1 )
by anitajames on Sunday, 2nd October 2005 @ 11:21:59 PM AEST
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Wow. I am blown away by this. The very first stanza feels like it came from my thoughs and feelings. Failure, the fear of failure seems to be the ruling force in my life since I lost my job last year. Very powerful emotion. If you let it, it will ruin you.

Stay strong,
Ann


Re: I need someone to save me (User Rating: 1 )
by Eternal_Dreamer on Monday, 3rd October 2005 @ 05:57:09 PM AEST
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You have come a long way dearest Archie. We learn from our mistakes and move on. Do not dwell on past failures concentrate on what's ahead. All the best to u dear friend.
Hugs,
Sue, ED.


Re: I need someone to save me (User Rating: 1 )
by Vampirequeen on Monday, 3rd October 2005 @ 06:45:46 PM AEST
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Wow awsome job.


Re: I need someone to save me (User Rating: 1 )
by Jenni_K on Monday, 3rd October 2005 @ 08:48:02 PM AEST
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Archie, I was very much blown away by this. I think it was a very honest write by a very honest man who has found his calling. Good going, my friend....
Jenni


Re: I need someone to save me (User Rating: 1 )
by hauntedscorp on Monday, 3rd October 2005 @ 09:14:49 PM AEST
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Great song Arch! Alot of stirring emotions present in this write. I love the honesty, and the positive spin in the second half.
Very well done, and hang in there: )


Scorp.


Re: I need someone to save me (User Rating: 1 )
by Wachumiri on Tuesday, 4th October 2005 @ 08:21:33 AM AEST
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And He will guide you. You have great talent, my friend. I loved this one.
Take care.
David


Re: I need someone to save me (User Rating: 1 )
by faith_my_eyes on Wednesday, 5th October 2005 @ 12:26:28 AM AEST
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I feel this one Archie..... Philippians 1:6...


Re: I need someone to save me (User Rating: 1 )
by emystar on Wednesday, 5th October 2005 @ 01:44:35 AM AEST
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wow!!!!!!!!!!!! shhhhhhewwwwwww this one rocks!
A mastertpeice with out being preachy.
huggs, big smiles,
emy
So true!


Re: I need someone to save me (User Rating: 1 )
by Elizabeth_Dandy on Wednesday, 5th October 2005 @ 02:27:39 PM AEST
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What a beautiful awoval of our NEED.
And also the Leit-Motive of the water and the little craft. (Jesus walks upon the water).
It's when we acknowledge publicly our need that we are saved. Not self-sufficiency - but NEED acknowledged need. that is wanting in so many.
You got it Archie.
Fortunate!
Elizabeth


Re: I need someone to save me (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Friday, 7th October 2005 @ 07:45:50 AM AEST
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  • Woah, this was shocking, in the best of ways..

    *Picks herself up from the ground, where she fell off her chair 0_o *

    Such a moving piece, written so elegantly..
    A thought-provoking write.

    Brilliant!


    ~KayT
    (who absolutely loved this)





  • Re: I need someone to save me (User Rating: 1 )
    by Former_Member on Friday, 7th October 2005 @ 08:24:12 AM AEST
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    You are.... therefore Is (Jesus).. ..(He saves).. How many times will (He)... (Forever.. trust).. my friend.. trust..

    Prayers...this write is written for all who believes.. as you do my friend... love, huggs..in the name of our (Lord Jesus Christ.. Amen...)

    RLD...


    Re: I need someone to save me (User Rating: 1 )
    by Former_Member on Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 05:25:28 AM AEST
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    Brilliant lyrics Archie. Would love to hear the music with it. Truly brilliant and a masterpiece.

    Thanks for sharing it.

    Tim
    :-)




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