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Pain
Contributed by
anangel_1593
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Sunday, 2nd October 2005 @ 02:19:08 PM in AEST
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I thought I could trust you,
You proved me wrong.
I thought I could love you,
Because of that song.
That lovey dovey junk,
Congratulations, it worked.
You stole my heart,
Then ripped it, you jerk.
Your eyes were cold
And unwelcoming too.
For so much of my life,
I was scared of you.
I knew i couldn't run,
There was nowhere to go,
My heart was bruised,
My death, so slow.
You knew what I felt,
And it made you smile,
To see me cry,
You're cruel and vile.
You scarred me for life,
No more could I trust,
Or allow myself to be smitten,
Or taken over by lust.
Your cackle, your eyes,
Burned into my soul,
Well you did it,
You achieved your goal.
I rely on myself,
That's the most I can do,
I cannot love,
For then I see you.
It pains me to think,
I will never be,
A mother holding her baby,
With my husband beside me.
But that's okay,
I live and learn,
I will be strong,
Though, for love, i still yearn.
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anangel_1593
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2005-10-02 14:19:08]
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Re: Pain
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by Kazzy1231 on
Sunday, 2nd October 2005 @ 02:29:02 PM AEST
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| Nice write. |
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Re: Pain
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by OzChick on
Sunday, 2nd October 2005 @ 02:51:18 PM AEST
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| This is a pretty good poem. Good rhyme and rhythm. The reader certainly gets a sense of your pain and I think it ends well with a positive, hopeful finish. You should be proud of yourself. |
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Re: Pain
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 2nd October 2005 @ 05:08:27 PM AEST
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| It is nicely written. Excellent flow and very heartfelt! I must say, well done! |
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Re: Pain
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by xPixiexDustx on
Sunday, 2nd October 2005 @ 05:26:26 PM AEST
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| This is really good, I love it. It flows really nicely too. I think we all have those feelings about a person at some point in our lives, it makes it hard to trust again. But like most things, we'll overcome it. My Grandmother always says, "Heartbreak builds character".. Never makes me feel better though lol. |
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Re: Pain
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by secretwind on
Sunday, 2nd October 2005 @ 07:22:38 PM AEST
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| well done |
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Re: Pain
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by kerrah681 on
Sunday, 2nd October 2005 @ 10:27:36 PM AEST
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| Goosebumps....Goosebumps.....goosebumps! I loved the poem and feel that pain. Really wonderful Poem!! Love is ridiculous, I agree, its insane confusion....Thanks so much for sharing, this poem. It reads as if it was genuinely written from your heart, none of the content seems forced, its excellent. Keep in mind that everyone in life has loved and lost, stay strong, you'll end up allright...Again amazing poem!!! |
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Re: Pain
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by brokenwings on
Monday, 3rd October 2005 @ 12:42:11 AM AEST
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i could feel your pain with this write, it brought back memories, that i have been tryign to bury but i have found new love now and i am learning to trust. i pray you find one too..
hugs
tasha |
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Re: Pain
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by Darkhorse71 on
Monday, 3rd October 2005 @ 11:22:59 AM AEST
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And with an attitude like yours you shall find it again. Add me to the chorus...this poem flowed nicely and your writing is very vivid.
peace and hugs, john |
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