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Half Smile
Contributed by
SunflowersAndTea
on
Saturday, 1st October 2005 @ 02:16:36 PM in AEST
Topic:
insomniac
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my Asian "neighbors" -they
do not see me.
the children in the street:
they do not hear me.
The dogs next door:
they do not smell me.
Only the night,
the sincere element ,
envelops my cuticles, tastes me.
seeps through my pores like liquid,
this seems trivial,
yet fleeting experience making me more of Me than
anyone else ever could.
and above the Smog and the smoke and the soot and
the holes in the ozone layer,
The stars are all of a dither
In the soul
of the midnight kerfuffle.
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SunflowersAndTea
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Re: Half Smile
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by brew on
Saturday, 1st October 2005 @ 02:20:14 PM AEST
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never sat on the roof top and sought, yet i do that at my papas sometime..go out in a back pasture, and just sit.! So peacful and calming...Very nice and peacful write.
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Re: Half Smile
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 1st October 2005 @ 02:40:42 PM AEST
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Nice spiritual awakening, how you blend in, with nature.. so innocent here... self nature, so childlike, I love this. even though you say, no one or dogs notice you there...I can hear the sounds of them, and its all a dream.. under those stars as you write.. the world breathing you in, you breathe it in.. parts + parts.. total sum.. wow.
A lot of senses at work, reading this poem..
My son used to do that, go up on top of the roof, to be alone, to think, under those stars of night.
Raquel Leah :D
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Re: Half Smile
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 1st October 2005 @ 03:54:24 PM AEST
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i do that....just sit there....on the roof....what better is there to do???
wow....this poem is AMAZING
_ Bethani _ |
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Re: Half Smile
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 1st October 2005 @ 07:05:54 PM AEST
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Beautiful. Love the imagery.
"The stars are all of a dither
In the soul of the midnight kerfuffle."
Wow! That is some brilliant writing right there!
*Impression noted!*
~Breezy
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Re: Half Smile
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by Darkhorse71 on
Sunday, 2nd October 2005 @ 03:30:22 AM AEST
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This is great - so vivid. I agree with Raquel, you can just see and hear and smell and feel everything. Personally, I go out in the back behind the barn away from the lights and sit under the stars. They are so much brighter and closer out there. Thanks for the good feelings this poem brings.
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Re: Half Smile
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by Wachumiri on
Monday, 3rd October 2005 @ 08:51:30 AM AEST
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Yes... I'll forgive you the tomato poem. Roofs are awesome. I actually put a couch on my cousin's roof to facilitate the... doing of such things as sitting on roofs. There're just no bloody lights up there. Hard to write.
Enough rigmarole, though. Great poem.
Take care.
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Re: Half Smile
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by Spike on
Sunday, 20th November 2005 @ 06:28:28 AM AEST
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Not on the roof, usually, but I have been up on the tiles at various times of day and night in various abodes. The nocturnal scene you wove is both suburban and earthly as well as other-wordly and mystical. I understand what you say about the great connectedness, the depth of self-awareness that comes in fleeting experiences.
'The stars are all a dither...' what a great finish.
Spike |
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Re: Half Smile
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 29th November 2005 @ 07:21:49 AM AEST
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| I love not only the imagery in this wonderful write...but the feel of the imagery.....You truely have the heart of a poet. |
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Re: Half Smile
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Saturday, 4th February 2006 @ 10:22:38 PM AEST
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| wow nice poem ... |
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