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A Thoroughly Modern Pilgrimage
Contributed by
spike
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Friday, 30th September 2005 @ 10:05:44 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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The lawn cushions me as I kneel
The wild one, brought to heel
Flowers wilting in my hand,
These sojourns more than I can stand
Here among the silent spaces,
I can speak to your good graces
Words that I could never say,
'Why do loved ones go away?'
Wrapped in a heavy cloak of grief,
Guilty absence, no relief
You burrowed deep into my skin,
So here I am and yes, you win
Drawn despite my clear distress
At using this place to confess
Problems I just can’t get past,
'How come friendships never last?'
Anger wells from deep inside,
A feeling that will not subside
It took so long to connect with you,
Your absence I just can’t get through
Bitter tears track down my cheeks,
These are lessons no one seeks
I scream till voiceless at the sky,
'Why do people have to die?'
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Re: A Thoroughly Modern Pilgrimage
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by Archie on
Friday, 30th September 2005 @ 10:34:34 PM AEST
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| You have a very well written poem here. I feel that way about some of the people i have lost. Thank you for a very honest write. |
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Re: A Thoroughly Modern Pilgrimage
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by reprobate on
Friday, 30th September 2005 @ 11:16:29 PM AEST
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i have said the same thing too many times.
excellent write!
thanks for sharing! |
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Re: A Thoroughly Modern Pilgrimage
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 1st October 2005 @ 03:46:08 AM AEST
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Firstly, I am truly sorry for your loss.
This piece is utterly heart wrenching...
An emotional piece, indeed.
You have arranged your words in a more then fluent fashion...expressed yourself honestly and clearly.
A beautiful piece.
I wish you well. |
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Re: A Thoroughly Modern Pilgrimage
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by Wachumiri on
Saturday, 1st October 2005 @ 05:25:15 AM AEST
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One can see the images in your head. You've transferred them to paper quite nicely. Well done indeed.
Take care, may brighter days come.
David |
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Re: A Thoroughly Modern Pilgrimage
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by Fionndruinne on
Saturday, 1st October 2005 @ 10:22:30 PM AEST
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Painful and fraught with meaning. You are spot-on with your observation that many tend rather than process grief, and I think that is like standing on the threshhold of something vast, but being unable to open the door. Such is, indeed, humanity.
Powerful and touching words. May you find the understanding we all seek.
Andrew |
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Re: A Thoroughly Modern Pilgrimage
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by brew on
Sunday, 2nd October 2005 @ 08:24:12 PM AEST
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its always a BIG hurt, yet we can not dismiss. Im sorry for the hard, and heartful, things in the life.! I can realte.....beleive, me.my mom was took at an early age almost 3 yrs ago.......Such a soul touching and sad write.
Welcome to YPDC.hoep you will continue to write
Brew~ |
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Re: A Thoroughly Modern Pilgrimage
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 13th April 2006 @ 08:40:24 AM AEST
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| Ooh Spike, back to genius. You do the complicated with such simplicity. Ya got a ear fer the hearbeat of humanity. My compliments to you. |
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Re: A Thoroughly Modern Pilgrimage
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by redsleeve on
Saturday, 13th September 2008 @ 09:36:30 AM AEST
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| very touching. great write! |
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