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Per Aevum ~~ For Eternity
Contributed by
Loende
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Friday, 30th September 2005 @ 07:15:51 AM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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A spark you were, ten years ago,
A blessing, even as you grew.
One gift I never thought to have,
My miracle come true.
I dreamed of what you'd grow to be,
Of all the things you'd do.
I wished to watch you everyday,
To hold and cherish you.
Then one bright day, my world collapsed,
The dream dissolved to grey.
Your spark extinguished in my womb,
His gift was torn away.
I think back now, to those long nights,
As grief ripped me apart,
Though I but held you a brief time,
You live on in my heart.
Copyright ©
Loende
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2005-09-30 07:15:51]
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Re: Per Aevum ~~ For Eternity
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Friday, 30th September 2005 @ 08:12:35 AM AEST
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| A very touching poem. my triplet sister was lost while in my mums stomach, 15 years ago. her name wouldve been Lucinda. stay strong. |
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Re: Per Aevum ~~ For Eternity
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by judasman on
Friday, 30th September 2005 @ 10:07:59 AM AEST
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| so sad. my heart goes out to you. same happened to me last year. breaks my heart every day |
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Re: Per Aevum ~~ For Eternity
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Friday, 30th September 2005 @ 12:07:41 PM AEST
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Very moving and touching work.
Must have been hard to write about what happened.
Sorry seems an empty word at times
Steve |
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Re: Per Aevum ~~ For Eternity
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by Spike on
Saturday, 1st October 2005 @ 09:13:05 AM AEST
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A subdued but evocative poem. Well structured, evenly paced, although I'd drop 'even' from the 2nd line of the first stanza as it lengthens the metre.
I hope this doesn't sound too cold - your comments make it clear that you lost a child and I'm glad for you that some of the pain has eased. However, most of the other comments are going to be expressions of sympathy, and I don't think you are posting for that.
Spike |
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Re: Per Aevum ~~ For Eternity
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by Loende on
Saturday, 1st October 2005 @ 06:38:40 PM AEST
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A bit odd, posting a comment on one's own work, but I feel I need to...
It's quite clear that this poem is about a loss that I experienced ten years ago. It's taken quite some time to come to the understanding that though I'll always carry the pain of her loss, I also have peace. This tribute is to celebrate an event that was very brief, but very important. Some of you have suffered similar loss and I urge you to explore your feelings, write, talk about it, because it does get esier to remember with joy. If this poem helps any of you, then I am truly blessed.
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Re: Per Aevum ~~ For Eternity
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by Wachumiri on
Wednesday, 5th October 2005 @ 06:03:52 AM AEST
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*hugs*
No use trying to make you smile this time... oh, never mind, you did it again.
Take care.
David |
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Re: Per Aevum ~~ For Eternity
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by Fionndruinne on
Thursday, 6th October 2005 @ 02:24:15 AM AEST
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Cara, this is indeed moving. Gracefully and tenderly written, and I am sure it will touch many people.
Go Día g'coinne thú
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Re: Per Aevum ~~ For Eternity
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by Kazzy1231 on
Tuesday, 8th November 2005 @ 04:44:45 PM AEST
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| I know how you feel I was pregnant with a daughter I was gonna name Davina but I had a miscarriage. |
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Re: Per Aevum ~~ For Eternity
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by faith_my_eyes on
Friday, 20th October 2006 @ 11:44:33 PM AEST
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| this is encredibly heartbreaking and sings with a sense of longing... I am certain one day the longing will be reconciled in eternity :-) |
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Re: Per Aevum ~~ For Eternity
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 2nd December 2008 @ 09:44:14 AM AEST
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deeply upsetting for me to read, but very powerful also. to have such a gift cruelly snatched away is something i can't even begin to understand.
be well dawn,
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Re: Per Aevum ~~ For Eternity
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 18th February 2010 @ 01:27:05 AM AEST
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So freaking glad this turned out to be a tribute. I was afraid to comment on it at first because I did not wish to bring back that pain. But like "they" say, God does work in strange ways. I have a freaking wonderful daughter but she wasn't actually my wife's first pregnancy as she miscarried the first time. while that was upsetting and I wonder what that child would have been like but it pains me more to wonder what life would be like without my daughter.
However brief, I am glad this poem speaks of the beauty in your child.
Love you. Sadly beautiful.
Tim |
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