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Ocean Comets
Contributed by
ShadowsCloud
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Saturday, 18th January 2003 @ 07:00:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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Ocean comets and cherry blossoms
Streaming purple light,
Garden webs and chocolate gems,
Glowing in the night.
Winter wine and rivers wide
Flowing fire bright,
Magic moons and desert dunes
Glowing in the night.
Crystal globes and castle moats
Rippling blizzard white,
Crickets' songs and rivers long
Glowing in the night.
Dances slow, dreams I know
Meant to last the night,
Visions graced by your face
Glowing in my mind.
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ShadowsCloud
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2003-01-18 19:00:00]
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Re: Ocean Comets
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by Unaekseveer1 on
Sunday, 19th January 2003 @ 09:12:45 PM AEST
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Hey Candice,
So many times have I tried to write in this sort of 'abstract style'(unsure of the name for it?)!
But just as many times I've failed so miserably to come up with something like this, which I would be very proud of!
I like your new vein of inspirational thought very much indeed!
Long may it continue flowing for us to enjoy reading!
With love
Dean:-) |
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Re: Ocean Comets
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by DreamWeaver on
Monday, 20th January 2003 @ 06:12:01 AM AEST
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| Awesome write ... beautiful words and love the way you have put it together with the rhyme. |
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Re: Ocean Comets
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by ShadowsCloud on
Monday, 20th January 2003 @ 06:15:33 PM AEST
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Dean,
I am glad that you have enjoyed my poem so much. I personally think that it came out very well. Although I never really have any ida what the style of a poem I am writing will be (because I am one of those who just write) I do like this style as well. I wouldn't mind writing more like this I find it to be a rather fun style to write.
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Re: Ocean Comets
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by Unaekseveer1 on
Monday, 20th January 2003 @ 06:35:56 PM AEST
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So am I Candice,
It's just they never come out like this, and if I actually try to make them, they read and sound rubbish!
I really would like one day for one to appear to me like this, but I aint holding my breath!:-)
Well done, I think it's as excellent with it's natural style as your others are with theirs!
With love
Dean:-) |
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Re: Ocean Comets
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 24th January 2003 @ 08:10:10 PM AEST
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| beautiful! |
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