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From my little place in heaven
Contributed by
poetsoul
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Wednesday, 28th September 2005 @ 05:27:19 PM in AEST
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From my little place in heaven,
I see new babes are born.
And wanting travels to that place,
I’ve yet to know the morn.
What would it be to live in skin,
All rapped in clothes of clay?
And who would I be born unto,
On summer, or winter’s day?
Would I be born next to a sea?
On hilly plains and meadows?
Or under coastal, cloudy skies,
That projects my mortal shadow?
What could I be, a boy or girl?
That body, can I choose?
Would I be just stuck in it?
If it’s wrong, I’ll be confused.
I can’t imagine those sensations.
My sensations are love and thought.
But, oh to know how fire burns,
And how the flame is caught.
Within a hand that feels the sting,
Then grips it back in pain,
Then gives it back to mother earth,
To feel her soothing rain.
To live a life of flightless flights,
In a body meant for walking.
And would that weary, frame I ware,
Be meant for someone’s hawking?
What would my tongue envelop there?
What language would I compose?
Should I forget that foreign talk,
I’ll speak my native prose.
To feel the bonds of physical love,
Two twining into one.
I think I could not stop until,
All my days are done.
But to feel the loss of love.
That parting I could not bare.
So sad it would to be alone,
Without no want or ware.
To be an orphan soul in here,
And to know you’re waiting there.
That world would never be the same,
With you lost in the air.
Perhaps it’s better than I am here,
To look on with distant sighs.
To say I’d rather be down there,
Would be the greatest lie.
Instead my love, I’ll wait right here,
Until you’re at my side.
And I will show you what I see
With my own heaven eyes.
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Re: From my little place in heaven
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by lostinmyself on
Wednesday, 28th September 2005 @ 06:28:04 PM AEST
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I really love this, I think all of the stanzas are stunning, I do however this this one is a little out of place:
What could I be, a boy or girl?
That body, can I choose?
Would I be just stuck in it?
If it’s wrong, I’ll be confused.
The rest of the stanzas are very beautiful, and then this one just seems too 'normal' if you know what I mean.
Other than that, fantastic poem.
Great write,
Phil xxx |
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Re: From my little place in heaven
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by seci on
Wednesday, 28th September 2005 @ 06:42:25 PM AEST
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| i wonder about these things myself. uh. i like that. very original. nice flow. i would honestly read more of your poems. you have a different writing style. love it. |
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Re: From my little place in heaven
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by remote on
Thursday, 29th September 2005 @ 02:26:28 PM AEST
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| Really like your work, I am sure everyone has these thoughts, I do too, but you put them in words so well. |
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