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untittled
Contributed by
xXxmegsxXx
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Wednesday, 28th September 2005 @ 01:59:53 PM in AEST
Topic:
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what is life
without love?
why should I live
when I can rest up above?
what's the point in staying
if it only brings pain?
in this broken world
it seems to always rain
yet still I cling on
and I don't even know why
as all this pain will go
in the moment I die
in this life there's no light
no hope, no joy, no one
consumed by the darkness
as there's no sun
and yet I'm still here
wondering around
silently crying
not maaing a sound
Copyright ©
xXxmegsxXx
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2005-09-28 13:59:53]
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Re: untittled
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by JenJen on
Wednesday, 28th September 2005 @ 02:25:23 PM AEST
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| woah very gd i tihnk it should be called errr emmmm..... a world without love |
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Re: untittled
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by Evening_Star on
Wednesday, 28th September 2005 @ 04:15:36 PM AEST
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I thought your poem was very good but to me it didn't seem to flow smoothly in spots, but thats just me. I definitely saw the point you were trying to get across. Keep up the good work.
liz |
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Re: untittled
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by anangel_1593 on
Wednesday, 28th September 2005 @ 05:45:14 PM AEST
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| Wow. That's, quite frankly, slightly scary. Lol. I have a friend who considered suicide and this poem sounds like something he'd say. keep writing. Ana |
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