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Only if You Were Here
Contributed by
toddy29
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Wednesday, 28th September 2005 @ 02:01:55 AM in AEST
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LovePoetry
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I hope to be what you can see, the one that's in your heart
Through times of sorrow and hope tomorrow, the one there from the start
To wish away through all the day and be there by your side
To show the most and hold you close 'til all your tears have dried
I wish I would, I wish I could, bring all the stars to you
And pull you near to lose all fear while all our dreams come true
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Re: Only if You Were Here
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by strider on
Wednesday, 28th September 2005 @ 03:21:02 AM AEST
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| A very good poem, very simple and I like the flow. |
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Re: Only if You Were Here
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 28th September 2005 @ 03:24:04 AM AEST
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Very beautifull write.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Only if You Were Here
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by mylady on
Wednesday, 28th September 2005 @ 08:13:07 AM AEST
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| Very nice ....Your dream come true.... mylady |
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Re: Only if You Were Here
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by Archie on
Wednesday, 28th September 2005 @ 08:21:47 AM AEST
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| This is good though it is am impossibility. I like the words any way. |
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Re: Only if You Were Here
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by highly_flammable on
Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 06:00:01 PM AEST
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| This was a very sweet poem. I liked the words you used and the rhythm fits the poem. Good job. |
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Re: Only if You Were Here
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by weepingprophet on
Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 06:48:22 PM AEST
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I found this nauseating. The style was good the flow was there, i geuss that's all that really matters, personal opinions aside.
haven't seen much of your stuff so keep it up.
~there is a sickness far more brutal than leprosy ensuring of fatality and blind to its own thalidomide presence-to its victims this sickness is known as-love~weepingprophet |
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