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April Thirtieth
Contributed by
orgygirl
on
Wednesday, 24th July 2002 @ 01:38:12 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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lying here
crying here
looking in my interior
feeling so inferior
i hate you
i hate me
no more dignity
no body can see
kick me i'm down
i hate this town
out of hope
out of dope
(they took that too)
what haven't you done
what can i do
staring
glaring
the silence is blaring
enough pills
always kills
now lay me to eternal rest
crestfallen
can't stop bawlin'
throat now swollen
bloodshot eyes tire
all over i perspire
feeling the effect
not knowing what to expect
shortage of breath
waiting for death
grimreaper at my door
please find me on the floor
ergo no more tomorrows
can deliver more sorrows
I bid thee farewell
Copyright ©
orgygirl
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2002-07-24 13:38:12]
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Re: April Thirtieth
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by Silverwings on
Wednesday, 24th July 2002 @ 03:32:16 PM AEST
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I like your poem, because it shows yourself... I like the rythym you put in it... Almost like lyrics to a song... sorry...
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Re: April Thirtieth
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Wednesday, 24th July 2002 @ 07:21:09 PM AEST
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This flowed nicely, but is such a sad poem. I'm sorry things got so bad. I hope they're a bit better now...and that youre hanging in there.
Jenni |
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Re: April Thirtieth
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by Terry_Stephen_Driscoll on
Wednesday, 24th July 2002 @ 09:43:38 PM AEST
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As sad as this is I have to say I really like the way you have executed the write - it's honest, harsh in places and has a raw street feel to it -(whether that was your intention I don't know)
Nevertheless it comes right at ya from that wounded soul territory that I'm sure we have all felt from time to time. A great write indeed - I'm glad I caught it.
Best regards
Terry |
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Re: April Thirtieth
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by xFalling_of_Starsx on
Thursday, 25th July 2002 @ 10:06:19 AM AEST
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| Hey hon i finally got mine set up. But yea, your poem is smashing and you know it. I can't believe you ever doubted your talent but i'm glad you got it back. I'm going to go check out some more of your poems and i'll be sure to leave you more comments Luv ya. |
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Re: April Thirtieth
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by zer0 on
Friday, 26th July 2002 @ 10:23:24 AM AEST
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wow, nice poem! and you know i never realized until now just how much i like the word "thirtieth", it's just got that special ring to it, dunno. anyways, you know they say when you see the light at the end of the tunnel, that's when you know you will live. the light you see is life, and the tunnel from which you emerge is death. ever wonder what it's like to be dead? ah, it's not so bad, the same as before you were born. well, good poem, i do know very much, what it is like to want to die, that is to be 'powered off', to live no more. i guess we'll all get our day, sooner or later.
take care
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Re: April Thirtieth
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by Chrissie on
Tuesday, 30th July 2002 @ 06:02:11 AM AEST
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I love this. Though it's very sad it has a really good pace and rhythm...well done.
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Re: April Thirtieth
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by withlove_me on
Wednesday, 7th August 2002 @ 05:09:19 AM AEST
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| The reality of death is harsh,and you bring that to the front of my mind.Even at the state of mind you were in,when you were looking for the light at the end of the tunnel,you were hoping it was a Train.I Hope your life is better for you now,,good feelings in your writing,,happiness to you,,,,withlove_me,, |
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