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Deceived
Contributed by
bobotheclown
on
Saturday, 18th January 2003 @ 02:40:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
mystical
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Hiding amongst the sun bleached rocks
Pale, lucid eyes stare hidden
Out of hardened, angry faces
Scrambling about, shrunken bellies
Howling for food in this bleak wilderness
A lone rider appears
On a weary, forgotten horse
He hails the odd inhabitants
And asks for lodging and food
They show no emotion their beady eyes tell all
Their slimy fingers stroke the rocks lustily
Beckoning the rider in
He dines with them
Whatever rotten morsel they can spare
He falls into a deadened sleep
They watch him almost like their cursed
Their padded feet slap the floor
Like their addicted, trancelike
To watching him sleep
He wakes with a cough
Unable to move his limbs
His panic bound eyes rove about
He can see his breath
He's their meal now
They dine on him
His supple raw body
Torn apart by their fangs
His blood will forever grace and torment their halls
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Re: Deceived
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by mckayla on
Saturday, 18th January 2003 @ 03:20:26 PM AEST
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Great writting! I really enjoyed reading this!
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Re: Deceived
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 18th January 2003 @ 04:14:03 PM AEST
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| Yikes Joel!! lol This is so Excellent, by far one of my favorites of yours! huggs always Nessa |
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Re: Deceived
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by roisin on
Saturday, 18th January 2003 @ 06:18:15 PM AEST
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An excellent write....very vivid imagery captured in my minds eye.
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Re: Deceived
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by OreO on
Sunday, 19th January 2003 @ 01:26:03 PM AEST
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I think you write beautiful mystical poetry.....i dont think it matters what you write about, it always turns out beautifully written Joel...your talent shines through all your writings....this is very dark, deep, mysterious, yet the devouring at the end ...i love the line he can see his breath ...after all what they done to him....ah...gives me chillbumps ....great write joel you should write another mystical one....
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Re: Deceived
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by Ilhar on
Monday, 20th January 2003 @ 05:01:48 PM AEST
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very, very good ...
Sharon |
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Re: Deceived
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by frozensuicide on
Monday, 20th January 2003 @ 09:15:40 PM AEST
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| this has its very own beauty carved in its writing... i really like this one... thank you for sharin it buddy! |
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Re: Deceived
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by Cynthia on
Sunday, 26th January 2003 @ 12:39:04 AM AEST
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| My minds eye could see every image you put into this. This is excellent work. *S* Cynthia |
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