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death of their lie
Contributed by
grim6669
on
Saturday, 24th September 2005 @ 05:26:14 PM in AEST
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the sun kissed the valley,
and said it's goodbyes,
the footsteps wound back,
and earased all their cries,
the ending is dead,
and the ground broke the fall,
the tower was leaning,
and broke after all,
their voices fill blankely,
of dead end surprise,
their truth was not real,
just shadows of lies,
that's why they blacked out,
and rolled the black dice,
trying to find out,
if they'll live or die,
connect to their life,
and find out just why,
they're hiding it from us,
the death of their lie.
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Re: death of their lie
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by remote on
Saturday, 24th September 2005 @ 06:06:51 PM AEST
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| You certainly are quite a talented little girl. Keep up the good work. |
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Re: death of their lie
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by grim6669 on
Saturday, 24th September 2005 @ 06:16:10 PM AEST
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| stop it you're making me blush!....i'm just kidding. thank you. |
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Re: death of their lie
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by loura on
Sunday, 25th September 2005 @ 07:10:06 AM AEST
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this is really good!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
by the way, it took me more or less 5 min to write the poem 'the real me', but to me it seems still incoplete..lol
best wishes...
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Re: death of their lie
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by lostrelic on
Monday, 26th September 2005 @ 06:52:12 PM AEST
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| cool write lets hope we get more then sad poetry from you |
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Re: death of their lie
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by Robert_Edgar_Burns on
Tuesday, 27th September 2005 @ 02:07:56 AM AEST
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I agree with lostrelic! You are very gifted but I would like
to see the less dark side of your talents. I am sure there
are many positive writes posted by you and I will certainly be seeking them out. Best wishes.
Rob |
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Re: death of their lie
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by Dark_and_Cold on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 07:03:17 PM AEST
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| One of your top three...a lot of depth here... |
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