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Get Off Your Hands
Contributed by
pisces101
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Saturday, 24th September 2005 @ 11:50:45 AM in AEST
Topic:
didactic
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Get off your hands,
they're not so soiled, Isabelle
Show them to the world.
Show them all is well.
I hope you run,
When you get the courage to stand.
Don't be ashamed...
Isabelle, get off your hands
Get off your hands
to fix your hair
Be so beautiful Isabelle,
let them stare
Get off your hands Isabelle.
You have not written me.
It been quite some time.
I am begining to worry,
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2005-09-24 11:50:45]
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Re: Get Off Your Hands
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by maestar on
Saturday, 24th September 2005 @ 12:19:01 PM AEST
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I'm not quite shore what this poem is about but I like it very much.
well done |
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Re: Get Off Your Hands
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by In_a_while on
Saturday, 24th September 2005 @ 12:28:22 PM AEST
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Very nice, short and ambiguous as to who is Isabelle. the rhyme was simple and the demands were hopefully inspirational as well
good stuff.. keep up the fine writing |
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Re: Get Off Your Hands
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by Archie on
Saturday, 24th September 2005 @ 12:32:09 PM AEST
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| There is an element of instlling courage in your poem but that is all I really see. |
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Re: Get Off Your Hands
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by remote on
Saturday, 24th September 2005 @ 02:25:57 PM AEST
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This poem has a tone of stern command rather than being inspirational, I am sure anyone would just want to lie on their hands (whatever that may be) and break something if they are told this four times, "Get off your hands Isabelle" acquires a characteristic of jeering rather than cheering, poor Isabelle. And why is Isabelle sitting/lying on her hands anyway?
Did you mean to convey this? |
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