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Two words at a time
Contributed by
SurenderRose
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Friday, 23rd September 2005 @ 04:25:21 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Two words at a time
Let me rite a poem We rite poems too express
Let me love my life not loving life brings stress
If I wasn’t fill with love me’s wud I die
If I wasn’t fill with try me’s wud I cry
I am the only one dat controls my self
I am the only one dat sees my heath
We can hide our feeling but we cant hide our eyes
We can read a book so we can ask why
You need to no u have only one life
You need too no u must live it rite
My tempted way r yet too come
My styles r here my styles can run
Why should we weep for ones dat do wrong
Why should we keep on doing strong
How Should I be a better me
How should I chant to reemission seas
God shall I ask u r u here
God why went we need u ur always there
Ending time is like ending hell
Ending poems so say farewell - Amy Mbengue
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SurenderRose
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Re: Two words at a time
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by remote on
Friday, 23rd September 2005 @ 04:37:17 PM AEST
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| I am begining to like your work, there is a nice jamaican/ragga/rap kind of beat to it. Shortening the words still bugs me though, but then you say its your style, so nothing much can be done about it. |
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Re: Two words at a time
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by SurenderRose on
Friday, 23rd September 2005 @ 05:35:12 PM AEST
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| amma be nice the next poem i rite amma not gonna shorten the words |
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Re: Two words at a time
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by Archie on
Saturday, 24th September 2005 @ 08:37:17 AM AEST
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| This is good although it is hard following all the shorthand words. This poem is very close to what i write about. :) |
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