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The Fly
Contributed by
grode
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Friday, 23rd September 2005 @ 04:55:27 AM in AEST
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As I lie in quiet contemplation,
A simple fly breaks my concentration,
I watch his pattern but I find none,
For in his mind there is no direction,
He is constant noise but for what cause,
He searches his mind but it is blank,
Must continue for the noise is calming,
From place to place with no destination,
Not happy unless moving,
He shall have no rest,
Why must his life have no purpose,
Why so small in a world so vast,
My thoughts of pity turn to humiliation,
As I am struck with this harsh realization,
I am the fly
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grode
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2005-09-23 04:55:27]
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Re: The Fly
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by Caged Soul on
Friday, 23rd September 2005 @ 09:03:34 AM AEST
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This is the first poem I have read from you , and what a way to get aquainted! Although I knew where you were going and the fact that that topic have been covered numerious times before, you had me locked till the end! Its simple and straight forward, yet I can still drown in all the deepness.
Looking forward too reading more!
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Re: The Fly
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by justme03 on
Friday, 23rd September 2005 @ 09:42:06 AM AEST
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woah
loved this
how u compared yourself to a fly is awesome. i love this idea. great poem *hugs*
luv, Kortnie |
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Re: The Fly
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by In_a_while on
Friday, 23rd September 2005 @ 03:47:42 PM AEST
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Very very well put together and i should hope that more people see this one... it really is great. It's honest, observant and small in a pile of poems so big.
keep up the fine writing!
dw |
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Re: The Fly
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by WAE on
Friday, 23rd September 2005 @ 06:24:12 PM AEST
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Interesting observation,
But there is a destination...
Good luck
Alex |
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Re: The Fly
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by maestar on
Saturday, 24th September 2005 @ 12:24:41 PM AEST
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| good, well done. |
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