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I Fall
Contributed by
pixie
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Thursday, 22nd September 2005 @ 06:53:47 PM in AEST
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I fall slowly to the ground,
Death is silent not making a sound,
Nobody hears my last call,
Not a soul present to witness me fall.
Falling silently through the air,
Nobody to know and nobody to care,
Death carries disease yet no voice,
When it picked me I lost my choice.
Even my last breath could not escape,
Couldn’t shake off his last rape,
I lay there so still and so cold,
Waiting for my nightmare to unfold.
My eyes shut to block out his pain,
Soul ready to snap under his strain,
My pain turns into his pleasure,
I become his eternal treasure.
How can you stop something you can’t see?
Tell me how can I ever be free?
The reaper is loose in my mind,
I am lost so far from mankind.
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pixie
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2005-09-22 18:53:47]
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Re: I Fall
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by Vampirequeen on
Thursday, 22nd September 2005 @ 07:19:41 PM AEST
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Woa girl that is deep and very emotional.
I hope your ok ?
If you need to talk let me know.
love and hugs
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Re: I Fall
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 22nd September 2005 @ 09:54:00 PM AEST
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the poem speaks for itself pix, sorry for your pain my friend . . .
((((((((((((((((((((((((pixie))))))))))))))))))))))))))
Ben
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Re: I Fall
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by jaeann on
Friday, 23rd September 2005 @ 11:22:37 AM AEST
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| oh my....sounds like the darkness is knocking loudly at your door.....you need some light.....i'll be thinking kindly my friend.....let it out....don't keep it in.....I know..... |
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Re: I Fall
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by blowfish_jane on
Saturday, 24th September 2005 @ 08:57:55 AM AEST
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Whoa!!! Now that was just ace Krissie. You paint such vivid imaged with your poetry. It speaks so much and so darn emotional.
Cool write sweetie.
Hugs,
Jane~ |
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Re: I Fall
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 24th September 2005 @ 02:15:38 PM AEST
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I see evolution here in your work...you are growing as a poet Krisse!
The depth and flow of this piece is a step above your past...wonderful growth! |
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Re: I Fall
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by candysears on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 09:04:45 AM AEST
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I really hope you will be ok....But your poem is just divine...I like it...A very powerfull write
God Bless!
Stay strong... |
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Re: I Fall
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Wednesday, 12th October 2005 @ 09:24:37 AM AEST
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This is very emotional and deep. it was really good but this is wow. painful and i just hope you are ok..
christina |
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Re: I Fall
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by Archie on
Saturday, 15th October 2005 @ 02:40:23 AM AEST
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I like the truth in this poem. The only way to stop death is to not let your spirit die. This is a very good write.
"Death is always the great equalizer" |
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Re: I Fall
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by pander on
Sunday, 6th November 2005 @ 10:46:23 AM AEST
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I agree with Jecks,
This piece seems to have moved up a gear. The standard of your work has always been high, but this is notably even higher. |
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Re: I Fall
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by Willofree on
Thursday, 10th November 2005 @ 06:40:03 PM AEST
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Very powerful write with potent and vivid imagery. A very sad write and heartfelt emotion. I hope the emphasis is more on the rhyme, then your actual state of mind.
Peace be with you, pixie
Well done
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