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Stoped
Contributed by
my_dark_paradise
on
Wednesday, 21st September 2005 @ 07:40:33 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Seize my hand,
Guide me on my own way,
Ease this anguish.
When was it that I fell,
Only forgotten instants will advise,
As time pours by.
Assembling strewn pieces,
Of exquisiteness deceived,
Fabrication and tears have frozen so.
And dew drop so pure,
Can never mend,
May never attain the blazing skin.
Within this reformatory,
Spread so slender,
Now merely covering and bones.
Too bitter to the touch,
Mislaid to the graze of demise,
Then your voice engraved this emptiness.
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my_dark_paradise
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2005-09-21 19:40:33]
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Re: Stoped
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 21st September 2005 @ 07:51:02 PM AEST
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| Very nice. |
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Re: Stoped
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by Inevitable on
Wednesday, 21st September 2005 @ 08:11:47 PM AEST
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| Didn't understand it but I thought it was intricate and vivid. |
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Re: Stoped
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by xxbreathlessx on
Wednesday, 21st September 2005 @ 09:34:16 PM AEST
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| a little confusing at the end but i think i got it. the imagery is very vivid and brings your character to life, her pain is almost felt. good job. |
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Re: Stoped
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by justme03 on
Thursday, 22nd September 2005 @ 09:24:23 PM AEST
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WOW is all that i can say! i reeeeallly need a dictionary tho! lol
other then that i didnt understand soem of the words i really liked this poem and liek wow...
luv, Kortnie |
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