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Beneath
Contributed by
Loende
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Wednesday, 21st September 2005 @ 03:57:27 AM in AEST
Topic:
spiritual
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Somehow you’ve seen through my mask
To that which lies below
Despite my hardest efforts made
You stayed, and now you know
The shadows that envelope me
Dark chains that weigh me down
Mocking voices echoing
You clearly heard the sound
Underneath the smiling face
A deeper well exists
This pit I sometimes fall inside
When the voices still persist
As liquid grief closed overhead
I felt upon my Soul
A warm and gentle hand, above
Saving me, your goal
The mask’s still here, though little used
My smile still sometimes jaded
But underneath, I feel at peace
My Faith no longer faded.
Copyright ©
Loende
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2005-09-21 03:57:27]
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Re: Beneath
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by Jenni_K on
Wednesday, 21st September 2005 @ 06:49:05 AM AEST
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Lovely write, Loende...
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Re: Beneath
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by judasman on
Wednesday, 21st September 2005 @ 02:08:37 PM AEST
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| evolve into what? something good maybe |
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Re: Beneath
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by Wachumiri on
Wednesday, 5th October 2005 @ 05:59:09 AM AEST
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No, judasman, something better. It's already something good, unless your eyes cannot see good poetry (I didn't say that for certain yet, I'll have to look your work and comments up). My friend Loende, this was good. It might need somesanding at the edges, but that's it. Well done.
Take care.
David |
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Re: Beneath
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 2nd December 2008 @ 09:40:09 AM AEST
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| a strong piece here. a good poem about rediscovering/strengthening your faith. good job. |
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