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Last Attempt
Contributed by
my_dark_paradise
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Tuesday, 20th September 2005 @ 10:31:27 PM in AEST
Topic:
abstract
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I leave you with my last wishes,
Upon soft lips,
Where only whispers rest.
Sighing solace,
Surprising pain,
Within these confines I lay.
Touches of tenderness,
Across a furrowed brow,
The wounds yet to be scars.
Bedded in by the night,
Tucked away,
Towards a vanishing point.
What fluent words to utter?
None now approach,
And a breath so sound…ever fading.
Was to you I’d bestow these,
Last expiring requests,
For now so cavernous in my psyche.
Are you now the final dreamer of dreams?
Thief of feelings?
My pride to prolong?
Now for it is that I discern,
The closing of all desires,
This very last wish.
Forever love,
Never justly say farewell,
And remain the same,
Please never change.
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my_dark_paradise
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2005-09-20 22:31:27]
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Re: Last Attempt
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by starry_eyed_soul on
Tuesday, 20th September 2005 @ 11:05:07 PM AEST
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| hmm i like it... good job... |
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Re: Last Attempt
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by Channing on
Wednesday, 21st September 2005 @ 07:06:23 PM AEST
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| Iike this poem, its very well written and has perfect word usage. |
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Re: Last Attempt
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by justme03 on
Thursday, 22nd September 2005 @ 09:20:56 PM AEST
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AH! now this is a bloody awesome poem! u used some killer awesome words in here and the descriptions blew me away. every sentence was structered so eloquently! i LOVED this poem! GREAT JOB!!!! :D *hugs*
luv, Kortnie! |
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