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Sudden Stop Love
Contributed by
Poetically-Inclined
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Tuesday, 20th September 2005 @ 05:07:45 PM in AEST
Topic:
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S-P-R-U-N-G, Boy that's my exact feelings.
Caught up; head over heels, My feelings are more than real.
Trusting no one but yet I follow you, doing dam near what ever you ask me to.
Captivated in our own personal fable,
boy you could when no one else was able.
Disenfranchised by you never, surplused with a love that potentially could last forever.
Earth is no longer my home, for within your love I choose to roam.
Artistically you've become vilified as my lover,
and like Winter does Summer we compliment each other.
Better than average, our love is laverised. And it defeats those who hate,
or try to contiplate, means to destroy what we built, and try to make us deny what we feel.
So that's why I feel its time to thank you, becuase no matter how many chicks it was you remained true.
S-P-R-U-N-G, is what you make me, although we haven't talked much lately, I'm so glad I'm still your baby.
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Re: Sudden Stop Love
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by In_a_while on
Tuesday, 20th September 2005 @ 05:48:39 PM AEST
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very well put together and brimming with strong rhyme and vocabulary
I love the lines:
Artistically you've become vilified as my lover,
and like Winter does Summer we compliment each other
Great stuff, and so loving too...keep up the extra fine writing
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Re: Sudden Stop Love
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 20th September 2005 @ 08:08:31 PM AEST
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and like Winter does Summer we compliment each other.
great line...and i like your voice, like u were talking straight to me |
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Re: Sudden Stop Love
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by viking-2272 on
Wednesday, 5th July 2006 @ 12:28:42 AM AEST
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| im no expert , your poem sounds good but sounds like you try too hard to rhyme, but like i said im no expert i cant seem to make long poems i reach down into my soal to write but i always peeter out |
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