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Holding on to heartbreak
Contributed by
lostinmyself
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Thursday, 15th September 2005 @ 08:37:59 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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It seems I struggle just to write this,
Even though it seems to be right,
The words are stuck in a recess,
In the furthest corner of my mind.
There's a hole in there full of memories,
Fighting for a way to escape,
But the shadow is deep and foreboding,
And when I search I find fear taking shape.
And the hole sometimes seems darker,
When I look at it in certain light,
My hands shake, when I think of falling,
Though they steady, when I think I can fly.
And really what is the difference?
I'll still be lost in the swirl of your eyes,
And I'm not sure I'll ever be looking,
At myself, whom I only despise.
And it's harder to breathe when I think it,
But it's nice to know I can die.
I'm holding my life in the palm of my hand,
And somehow, It feels so right.
But I wish it was you who were holding,
And you would throw me with all of your might,
For if you were the one who was killing,
I know that I would not fight.
And each time I swallow I'm hurting,
There's this pain here deep in my chest,
I think it's this thing called a heartbeat,
I think someone has left it in jest.
I'd rip it to pieces in moments,
If I had any of my courage left,
But I'll just hold onto heartache and live this,
Because that's what I seem to do best.
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Re: Holding on to heartbreak
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by WAE on
Thursday, 15th September 2005 @ 08:50:26 PM AEST
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Phil, it is hard to have a poetic soul, isn't it?
I hope you will get over it. Tomorrow you will feel differnet... Lovely writing...
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Re: Holding on to heartbreak
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by JHONEN32629 on
Thursday, 15th September 2005 @ 09:03:55 PM AEST
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| It's a really good peom, I enjoyed it, and I do hope you feel better someday |
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Re: Holding on to heartbreak
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 15th September 2005 @ 09:07:32 PM AEST
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not 2 mention the fact u also write poems of such emotional magnitudes, u have so much in u that u put in 2 your poems very
revealing, a beautiful write that goes far beyond any poem . . .
((((Phil)))))
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Re: Holding on to heartbreak
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 15th September 2005 @ 09:19:57 PM AEST
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Oh hon! It's beautiful in it's overbearing sadness. You really do express that well - just wish you didn't have to feel that way to do it.
J.
(sending in hugs... and candles.)
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Re: Holding on to heartbreak
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by anitajames on
Thursday, 15th September 2005 @ 09:24:44 PM AEST
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| Beautiful and painful to read. Excellent write, and I never say that! |
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Re: Holding on to heartbreak
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by Vampirequeen on
Thursday, 15th September 2005 @ 09:42:45 PM AEST
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Awww Philly girl its painful to see you in so much pain .If you ever need to talk pm me ok.
love and hugs |
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Re: Holding on to heartbreak
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by Man_On_High on
Thursday, 15th September 2005 @ 10:50:10 PM AEST
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Youre right..
the ending is best..
I love the "in your face" quality
of that last stanza..
Seems you're at a crossroads here..
Don't continue to beat yourself up..
Do what is right and move on...be happy-
Much luck in this...to you-
Yours-
Billy |
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Re: Holding on to heartbreak
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by visualizing_life on
Thursday, 15th September 2005 @ 11:40:10 PM AEST
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| one word....powerful |
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Re: Holding on to heartbreak
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by Sahara on
Friday, 16th September 2005 @ 05:25:11 AM AEST
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I gotta say... this is an absolutly brilliant write, ripe with emotion, dripping with anguish. Excellent job displaying the heartache, it will get better just give it time.
Best of luck.
Sonya |
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Re: Holding on to heartbreak
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by Rxqueen on
Friday, 16th September 2005 @ 11:09:36 AM AEST
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| Beautifully tragic. I felt the pain pouring off the screen. I relate to this, so of course I like it, but it is more then that. The way it progresses from beginning to end. There was anticipation. It was a great evolution. Well done!! XOXO |
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Re: Holding on to heartbreak
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by pixie on
Friday, 16th September 2005 @ 12:17:22 PM AEST
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powerful ending, I wish that there was something I could do or say to make you forget your heartcahe Philly *hugs* amaizngly written, very well worded
Pix xx |
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Re: Holding on to heartbreak
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by Nazmythian on
Friday, 16th September 2005 @ 07:13:21 PM AEST
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I can not believe you thought I might not like this Phil. I tend to agree that the poem gathers strength as it progresses, and the ending Is severely powerful in both pain and a lasting sence of perserverance. I like this muchly !!!!
Yay Phil !!!!
Nazzy ~ |
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Re: Holding on to heartbreak
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by blowfish_jane on
Saturday, 17th September 2005 @ 12:05:10 PM AEST
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Wow!!!!
This was just so sad Phil, it made me tear up just by reading your powerful emotions in this peice.
I do agree with everyone, when it comes to showing your emotions you do it better than anyone else.
Thanks for sharing this Philly.
Jane~ |
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Re: Holding on to heartbreak
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Sunday, 18th September 2005 @ 04:17:58 AM AEST
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| an amazing poem, well done. i will be looking at more from you |
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Re: Holding on to heartbreak
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 19th December 2005 @ 01:48:26 PM AEST
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| awwwwww sadly sweet and I too understand that place so well, that place that seems to well up and leave us full of pain...great write lil sis!!!! |
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