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The Garden Hose
Contributed by
jyssvw22
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Wednesday, 14th September 2005 @ 09:47:47 PM in AEST
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The brick path
Which weaves and tangles through the garden
Circumvents the delicate pollen
A rare species of white rose
The green snake that mimics the garden hose
Mountain majesty
A brick house sits
In the midst of a collection of leaves and dirt
Tree stumps
Cut bark dangles off the red oak
A picket fence
Protects the rain from the wooden elements
The garden filled with dew that drenched
Exudes the nostalgia of romance
And so the squirrels do their dance
I see them stare as I walk their beaten path
Blackbirds wrestle for the lonely worm
Their chirps intended as a mating call
You can call it a love song
The gazebo they hover sits empty
The lovers were never alone
The rocks that line the trodden path are plenty
Lined with ginger, meadow roe and spring beauty
Water fountains feed the thirsty
Pine cones litter the nesting of fertility
Draw bridges
Allow access over a stream
Gliding to a sharpened apex
Rattlesnake plantain
Gender neutral without a sex
Wake robin
Protects the insects
Inscribed in the shrubs
Jacobs’s ladder climbs above
The garden is watched by the doves
In its own self sustained love
Life reaches and is alive with a thump
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Re: The Garden Hose
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by Man_On_High on
Wednesday, 14th September 2005 @ 10:09:19 PM AEST
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I have missed your work beyond the telling..
What can I say..
It's brilliant-
..divinely inspired work-
..so well written..great diction as always-
After much consideration, I have decided
to quote these words as the most inspiring to me..
(though I could quote the work as a whole..)
"The garden filled with dew that drenched
Exudes the nostalgia of romance
And so the squirrels do their dance
I see them stare as I walk their beaten path"
to mention 'imagery' is trivial..
..but yours here..has brought me to Eden.
Great to see you again jyss..
Sincerely-
Billy
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Re: The Garden Hose
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by hauntedscorp on
Wednesday, 14th September 2005 @ 10:28:58 PM AEST
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JJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Welcome back! Welcome back!!!! You know I missed you like crazy right???
This piece is just breathtaking...every line is so sooo visual and enchanting. I just love this write. I can just picture this wonderful, peaceful place! To say the least, you took me there, and you're about to take me there again...because I'm reading this again : ) Wow. You went out with a bang, and came back with one...Excellent!! Glad to see you gracing the homepage again!!!
H.S.
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Re: The Garden Hose
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by brew on
Wednesday, 14th September 2005 @ 10:36:29 PM AEST
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Images, that are so vivid.....the sceniro, and more is here for all the stanzas. yes, beautiful and inspiring work. you have more than imagination........it works and makes all.
Thanks,
Brew~ |
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Re: The Garden Hose
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by CarolinaBlue on
Wednesday, 14th September 2005 @ 10:37:48 PM AEST
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Jyss, this flowed effortlessly. You've taken me to one of my favorite places in the world, beautiful, just beautiful, as a matter of fact I think I'll stay and smell the roses a little while. Welcome back, good to see you posting again.
~Blue~ |
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Re: The Garden Hose
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by deadheadpoet on
Wednesday, 14th September 2005 @ 11:00:38 PM AEST
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| wow brother...this was a great visual trip man...and I thank you for it. I was lost in this garden of peace. Beautiful writing indeed, much peace to you, Laura |
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Re: The Garden Hose
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by gary on
Wednesday, 14th September 2005 @ 11:05:30 PM AEST
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| That was a really good start I gave it a 4. Comment to me one of "your" favorite that you've wrote. GL |
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