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My Forever Fate
Contributed by
evshrug
on
Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 08:33:18 AM in AEST
Topic:
goodbyepoetry
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Moving from my birthplace at age three
Has scarred a deep effect in me.
Ethereal Mountains: Paradise lost
By family tempest I was toss’t.
Home never landed anywhere,
Mother here and father, there.
I’ve been a visitor for fifteen years,
Their asphalt pillows slick with tears.
Friends, understand I cannot stay.
Won’t keep this wanderlust at bay.
‘Cause of this need for new progress,
I suffer now from fitful rest.
I will realize my attractant
For places non-existent.
Guided by my gilded mem’ries,
Seek but never see my child trees.
Copyright ©
evshrug
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2005-09-13 08:33:18]
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Re: My Forever Fate
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by daprdan on
Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 08:47:24 AM AEST
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This is VERY Good for one so young...
I Hope you continue writing poetry...
I too started when I was around 15 but no one ever read it as I did not share it (there was no internet so long ago) and it was NOT something you shared with a buddy LOL....
I didn't get back into it until I was nearly 30 and now wish I had saved all of them... (Hindsight is always 20/20 isn't it)
So let me suggest you not only save it but put it in a bound notebook AND on the internet everywhere... and don't stop writing and revising... You are destined for greatness...
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Re: My Forever Fate
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 08:54:14 AM AEST
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beautifully written,
hugs n' love nessa
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Re: My Forever Fate
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by thepizzaguy on
Sunday, 18th September 2005 @ 09:39:34 PM AEST
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I must say, Ev, the rhyme scheme in this is amazing. I enjoyed every line. And the asphalt pillow line, was the best one in my mind. Great write, Ev. Hopefully I won't be too busy and I'll get some time to write on this site.
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