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Twisted Thoughts
Contributed by
sride686
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Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 06:51:30 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Alone at night with thoughts so grim
Left here to wonder with nothing with in
Hurt and need or lust and greed
A dark hurting love with pain it breads
Thoughts that are twisted like an evil grin
Darker the smiles as they come from with in
Cold bloody rage with bones of cold
Skeletons fight like days of old
Dark twisted thoughts with in my mind
Release my thoughts in riddles and rhymes
A Hand is out with nothing to grip
I feel for help as my mind starts to slip
Hatful pride and hateful dreams
Hurt in my heart as my pain starts to feed
Melancholy views from my downhearted sight
Hate in my heart but its me I don’t like
Battles rage as they fight to control
To take over my life and consume my soul
Whisper your thoughts and call out my name
I need your love to conquer my pain
~Steve~
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sride686
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Re: Twisted Thoughts
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 08:43:44 AM AEST
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another beauthful write steve i like your style and your presentation good luck 2u . . .
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Re: Twisted Thoughts
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by suicidal_imbecile on
Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 12:47:13 PM AEST
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Im glad to hear your still alive, i was pretty worried for a while. Your peoms still rench at my soul. I hope you come home to happiness
with love
kate |
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Re: Twisted Thoughts
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 01:50:31 PM AEST
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I like this soul-searching write of yours Steve. Your emotions are expressed well, and I like some of the less obvious rhyming you added towards the end. Nice job.
Scorp. |
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Re: Twisted Thoughts
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by allowanceofthoughts on
Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 04:39:00 PM AEST
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| As I read your words, I felt pain. How wonderful to be able to get out what we are dealing with or feel by words. Hang in there and take care. Nicely Done! |
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Re: Twisted Thoughts
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by sprinter27 on
Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 09:24:52 PM AEST
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this was great, steve! i really enjoyed reading this, even though i'm extremely sorry that you are in pain like this. wish there was something i could do besides send lots of luck and hope and wishes to you! just remember who you love. even though that brings you pain too... UGGH! wish i could paint happy pictures into your mind... but all i can do is HOPE and send lots of LUCK. i'm so sorry that you have to put up with this pain, and hang in there sounds lame, but it's all i've got. take care of yourself! and keep up the great work!
~sprints |
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Re: Twisted Thoughts
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Sunday, 18th September 2005 @ 04:24:18 AM AEST
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| awesome write, well done |
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Re: Twisted Thoughts
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by LolaWhite on
Friday, 7th October 2005 @ 02:33:56 PM AEST
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I know that you face many hard times over there my Steve, but the hope that you will return to your girls will get you through. I loved this write...so full of pain and raw emotion it just grips at the reader's heart. Kisses my love.
Your Lea-Ann |
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