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Dead Roses
Contributed by
wachumiri
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Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 04:47:49 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Dead roses beckon me to stay
To slumber yet another day
Their withered souls envy my life
And therefore strive to give me strife
They speak of love that’s come and gone
They speak of night while breaks the dawn
If I turn back and look behind
I’ll miss what life wants me to find
I must leave Past where it should be
Refuse to answer to its plea
For then can I my journey take
And travel on, for Goodness’ sake.
Copyright ©
wachumiri
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2005-09-13 04:47:49]
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Re: Dead Roses
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by tonydread on
Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 05:45:46 AM AEST
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| yo ur realy good can u help me learn to write |
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Re: Dead Roses
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 08:12:14 AM AEST
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truely a beautiful poem, it flowed so well, i was surprized to be at the last line!
hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Dead Roses
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by anitajames on
Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 10:09:12 AM AEST
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They speak of love that’s come and gone
They speak of night while breaks the dawn
These lines say so much. Isn't it frustrating how little reminders always bring you back to pain that you think you have gotten past? Good Write. |
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Re: Dead Roses
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by Archie on
Wednesday, 14th September 2005 @ 05:47:52 AM AEST
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This is very good.
You understand a lot about human nature as refered to from the bible. |
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Re: Dead Roses
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by fielding88 on
Wednesday, 14th September 2005 @ 10:44:09 PM AEST
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| Excellent stuff. The past is something I have trouble leaving where it belongs. I've tried to write about it myself, but always seem to fall short. Your stanzas here were straightforward and staggeringly to the point and it gave the poem a sort of strength and (sorry I'm trying to think of a word, sort of like relevance, but not exactly relevance. more like a mix between importance and relevance I guess. lol I cant think of the word, but hopefully it exists) nevertheless, it was an excellent piece. |
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Re: Dead Roses
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by Loende on
Wednesday, 14th September 2005 @ 11:29:00 PM AEST
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Journey on, my friend, the best is yet to come.
Be well,
Dawn |
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Re: Dead Roses
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by Fionndruinne on
Sunday, 18th September 2005 @ 03:03:40 AM AEST
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Aye, 'tis rather gude.
Good wording, and strongly written.
Now brush your teeth.
Andrew |
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Re: Dead Roses
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 18th September 2005 @ 03:40:14 AM AEST
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| Wonderful write. So full of emotion. I really enjoyed this piece. |
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Re: Dead Roses
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by remote on
Sunday, 18th September 2005 @ 04:13:09 AM AEST
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| Great sentiments, well put in words. Enjoyed this. |
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Re: Dead Roses
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 5th October 2005 @ 08:08:46 AM AEST
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David u have such a unique style of writing. You can always produce an outstanding write to captivate ur reader. The past is better left and forgotten. May ur journey ahead in life be prosperious. Always a delightful pleasure to read ur work.
*hugs*
Sue |
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Re: Dead Roses
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by ChibiMiroku on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 01:57:36 AM AEST
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| Wow. Short and sweet, but had more meaning than some long poems. Nice! |
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Re: Dead Roses
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by miss_jules on
Wednesday, 12th October 2005 @ 03:50:46 AM AEST
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| great poem, good message. best of luck to you! |
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Re: Dead Roses
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by EverlastingDawn on
Friday, 18th November 2005 @ 06:16:45 PM AEST
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I beautiful poem
It really is hard to break away from memories
Wonderful personification, imagery, and metaphors
Amazing Write
~Dawn |
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