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Foolish Heart
Contributed by
Archie
on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 10:05:07 PM in AEST
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Foolish heart
You are broken down
like a wall
to a captive city
enemies
come and threaten
to make love
disappear
I hear the rumors of revenge within the making
and isolations from the ones who hurt you deep
I stayed up wrestling trying to make you stronger
and yet you in your pain continue to grow weak
Foolish heart
love your brother
though he hurt
and stab at thee
he forgets
but he loves you
do not shut
out his need
I know that you want to make him feel like you
for all the pain that he has put your heart through
Yet you are stronger if you continue to love
and it is something he can immitate in you
I know how you feel cause i've been there
I cried each tear that you have cried
He may not feel the same you do
but love is stronger, you decide
Foolish heart
you are loving now
don't worry
if you'll be hurt again
when you break
we will cry our tears
then forgive
and love again
Notes; I worked on this song for over a year and to me this song still is not perfect. I think it is a important enough song for me that even in it's incomplete form it has a message that I am still in need of as well as others. In this song i am singing to my own heart.
Copyright ©
Archie
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Re: Foolish Heart
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 10:08:16 PM AEST
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i think its a beautiful song archie:)
hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Foolish Heart
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 10:20:51 PM AEST
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| Really enjoyed reading your song. Thank you for posting even if you think it is incomplete. I could see where you were coming from. Great write. |
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Re: Foolish Heart
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by Jenni_K on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 10:55:52 PM AEST
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Really very beautiful, Archie.... The message is very clear to me.....
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: Foolish Heart
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by brew on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 11:18:55 PM AEST
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Defiently , a message there and for one ..........Very touching
Brew~ |
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Re: Foolish Heart
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 11:49:30 PM AEST
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Yup...i totally get your message and tis a good one at that :)
We all must forgive, but (like your song) sometimes the hardest person to forgive is yourself.
I enjoyed the expression, a great song! |
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Re: Foolish Heart
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 12:43:51 AM AEST
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Archie,
I love this , I could see this song making it big!!! It i moving and I would love to hear it to music!!!! Your message came across well.
Leia36 |
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Re: Foolish Heart
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 01:49:02 AM AEST
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nice job archie smooth and flowing . . .
Ben |
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Re: Foolish Heart
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by Willofree on
Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 11:43:17 AM AEST
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A beautifully written song, about a subject that is so important as forgiveness. Perhaps it is the best work that is never really finished. It is but a segment taken from the flow of time, as time marchs on......
Well done, Archie
Thanks for sharing this part of your self
Will |
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Re: Foolish Heart
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 02:27:20 PM AEST
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Some very good lines in this song. The second verse was my favourite. Your emotions flow free in this write, and that's what makes it memorable.
Nicely done.
Scorp. |
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Re: Foolish Heart
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 09:44:22 PM AEST
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Beautifully written piece Archie: thank you for posting.
I would love to hear you sing it. Or at least hear you recite it. Is there anyway in a forum you could do that?
I am not sure when and if a poem or song is ever perfect, only the writer can feel that. For me as a reader, it is there.
I was singing to with your heart as well. It is beyond beautiful.
Your write follows in a very nice pattern, The content is definitely great, its flows very natural.
Yes, well said, perceived, very sensitive contact, awareness.
Raquel Leah :D
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Re: Foolish Heart
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Thursday, 15th September 2005 @ 05:29:42 PM AEST
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So beautifully crafted my dear friend. I love the message behind your song. Forgiveness is the key for us to be able to move on.
This song comes from the depths of ur beautiful heart. Well done Archie
Hugs,
Sue, Dreamer |
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Re: Foolish Heart
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by Helenesovig on
Thursday, 9th May 2013 @ 02:05:20 PM AEST
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I love that you compare your heart to a city surrounded by a fragile ore broken down wall, making your heart vulnerable , I found that quit inspiring. I also really liked the ending about the circle of loving, hurting and forgiving.
A very nice job! |
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