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what are those lines, on your face?
Contributed by
remote
on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 06:06:08 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Words from a distance
carried to my ears:
A child asking an old man,
"what are those lines, on your face?"
Old man answered,
"That dear child
is the map of journeys
that I have undertaken".
The child curious, asked again,
"But why do they all criss and cross?"
Old man said with a smile in his voice,
"Oh, every road that I took
crossed every road that I took".
The child replied all knowingly,
"yes, like school to home
and home to the park,
and to the Vidhya's house".
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2005-09-12 18:06:08]
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Re: what are those lines, on your face?
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by Archie on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 06:26:38 PM AEST
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| Great poem. "Are you adding to the journey theme that I have been writing about?" If you are this would be a good poem to add to that series. |
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Re: what are those lines, on your face?
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 06:30:27 PM AEST
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wonderfully captured, precious moment in time:)
hugs n' love nessa
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Re: what are those lines, on your face?
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by xxbreathlessx on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 06:36:23 PM AEST
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| such a charming poem! its graceful and sweet, really puts a smile on the readers face. i loved it. amazing job. |
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Re: what are those lines, on your face?
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by Pyrofungus on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 06:56:21 PM AEST
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that's so sweet. trully shows the innocence of a child.
please comment on my work too
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Re: what are those lines, on your face?
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by brew on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 11:26:41 PM AEST
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Great anology to journeys for the elser..........well may i say for all. Liked this alot. Very good write, andyes we all can have somewhat a lil lines.............LOL
Brew~ |
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Re: what are those lines, on your face?
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by MorningDove on
Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 01:45:55 AM AEST
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I love children, they take everything so literally. In their innocence they are quite brilliant, as is this relay of conversation. Definitely an interesting piece of work.
Rita |
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Re: what are those lines, on your face?
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by mylady on
Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 07:32:25 AM AEST
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I think it a great poem like the part it said.....
the map of journeys that I have undertaken..
I like it. |
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Re: what are those lines, on your face?
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 08:53:07 AM AEST
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what a great write this is flowed nicely i enjoy the story and the way it led up 2 the end nice
writting, and style also . . . .
Ben |
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Re: what are those lines, on your face?
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by venkat on
Thursday, 15th September 2005 @ 01:08:50 AM AEST
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| A very nice poem..beautifully presented. :-)venkat |
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Re: what are those lines, on your face?
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by WAE on
Thursday, 15th September 2005 @ 04:49:56 PM AEST
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This is one I like the best. I would suggest major additional work but the idea is grteat!
I can visualize the scene and read the emotions... Very, very good!
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