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say good bye
Contributed by
theimaginationofluke
on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 03:56:22 PM in AEST
Topic:
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is a life worth living,
or is death a threat,
what have you bin doing,
and whats bin said?
a nose is for breathing,
and eyes are for seeing,
but what do we want to see?
is a mouth for speaking,
or for eating,
and what are we going too eat?
burgers and chips,
or a healthy meal?
a face,
a smile,
kiss my lips for a while,
but whatever you do just say good bye
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Re: say good bye
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by xXxmegsxXx on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 04:01:06 PM AEST
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wowey luke! thats really good! a wonderful write, keep it up!
megs
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Re: say good bye
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by JenJen on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 04:03:34 PM AEST
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same as megs
this is reli gd
u should try ritin some different poems like suicidly poems or somethin random like dat u get loads of coments lol :P mb even a love poem i think u'll b reli gd @ it well done
keep it up
love
jenny
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Re: say good bye
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 04:27:51 PM AEST
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| Life is worth living, but sometimes I drink and smoke, I wonder where my life is going, I wonder what I want to do in my life and I wonder why am I destroying myself? Life was not made to be destroyed but then I say, yes it was, we were born to die. Anyway. About your poem, it was good, I understand what you are trying to say. SLipSiX. |
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Re: say good bye
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 04:35:12 PM AEST
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| You are right. Although I did find the line on seeing interesting enough. That's about it, though... |
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Re: say good bye
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by judasman on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 06:23:18 PM AEST
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| its not really is it but last two lines though something sad and tragic there |
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Re: say good bye
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by JenJen on
Thursday, 15th September 2005 @ 09:09:57 AM AEST
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what is it with burger and chips they aint nice!
u need to work on ur rhyming and its not a bad comment its constructive critisism. anyway its better than i cud do. from louise xx |
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