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Cloud In The Desert
Contributed by
gwenevere
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Thursday, 8th September 2005 @ 06:06:08 PM in AEST
Topic:
InspirationalPoems
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Walking through the desert,feel the searing heat
Sand of death awaits me, burning at my feet
Haze of sweet illusions, tempt my tortured mind
Visions of such pleasures, left so far behind
Scorpion goes scuttling by, sting within his tail
Circles whilst I stagger, listens as I wail
Watching, ever waiting, for my sad demise
He the final winner, me the only prize
Left alone without a hope, no one to hear my call
Nothing now can save me, I tumble then I crawl
Fog of sleep before me, playing on my mind
Dreaming of my loved ones, left so far behind
Feel a drop of moisture,rapture on my skin
Sense of new survival, surges from within
Drag myself awake, find my senses still remain
Recieved by such a wondrous thing, a single spot of rain
I move so slowly forward, was that a sign to me
A group of tents, some camels, before my eyes I see
My prayers have all been answered, I am saved at last
I felt that single droplet ,and now the cloud has passed
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Re: Cloud In The Desert
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by Man_On_High on
Thursday, 8th September 2005 @ 09:50:14 PM AEST
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It's a bit sad..but well written..
I love your work-
B |
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Re: Cloud In The Desert
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by MadCackle on
Thursday, 8th September 2005 @ 10:04:08 PM AEST
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| nicely done i enoyed it I like the title as well |
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Re: Cloud In The Desert
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by Vampirequeen on
Thursday, 8th September 2005 @ 11:34:07 PM AEST
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Yes its quite sad but yet you know.
well done on this write. |
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Re: Cloud In The Desert
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by remote on
Friday, 9th September 2005 @ 02:46:23 PM AEST
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| A good writing has a power to transport you some place else and makes you feel all the emotions, even those not said, this one is almost there. Brilliant begining, the last section is'nt quite tidy. |
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